Coal dusted face,
with wrinkled worries,
I love the way you have orientated this poem with such vivid descriptions allowing the reader to clearly materialise the character out of your words such a beautiful crafted technique you have used!
his baby girl stumbles
in his dirty mining boots,
swallowing his pride
and wiping his tears,
he has a genuine smile
for the first time in weeks.
Wow such a beautiful portrait this poem has shaped into such a lovely way to display and depict a relationship between a father, his daughter and his job!
I liked the descriptions of not only appearance but emotions as well has made this poem amazing and a nice read!
Wow, what a lovely, moving, sad and yet touching poem! I can clearly the picture the scene and the bond of father and daughter, you have used miners in this write but it made me think of all the soldiers and other fathers out there who's jobs make them distant from their family.
Really loved this one and it leaves you with a lot of feelings of happiness and sadness but yet just thankful that in this poem he gets this moment with his child. Lovely. x