Living in a house where you used to walk
Where you used to live and breathes, hurts
Stepping in footsteps where you have been
Listening to a silent house but staying alert

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Line 1: I love that first line! Perfect.
Line 2: 'breathes' should just be 'breathe'
Line 3: Again I absolutely love this line!
Line 4: We all tend to do this when the place is silent -- in silence we often mistakably hear strange noises/ or noises we aren't aware of without silence.
This is a beautiful opening which captures the emotion well and introduces readers to the story. That last line also makes me think you are trying to listen for your dad - like you may feel him with you, by your side, but you want to hear him to make sure you aren't just imagining it or something...

Who knew losing someone so close to you
Could lead to a feeling of being defeated
Sadness overwhelms my every being and soul
It's like my heart will always feel incompleted

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Line 1: Great continuation from stanza one
Line 2: I can relate to this line for a number of reasons
Line 3: I like this line, but 'every' doesn't really fit - we only have one soul, etc and to me 'every' implies many. Consider revising?
Line 4: I can see what you've done here, but 'completed' with a 'd' doesn't really work. Don't sacrifice your writing for rhyme. (:
I can relate to this stanza. The feeling of defeat and sadness at the loss of someone close. More than once.

There will never be enough tears that fall
That will show how much I really miss you
And how everyday just keeps passing me by
Reminding me of how all your hugs are overdue

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Line 1: Great imagery.
Line 2: Nothing can show how much you miss someone/ something unfortunately. Only we ourselves know how much.
Line 3: Here you seem to say you're spending too much time thinking about your dad - grief doens't have a time limit. Some people get over something easily; others it may take years.
Line 4: Aww.. this line speaks volumes! Perfect ending.
This stanza seems to capture all your raw emotion. Beautiful write.
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OVERALL;
Everyone can relate to this poem because everyone has lost someone.

The flow of your piece is perfect.
Rhyme is great too - but need to fix stanza 3
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Perhaps try:
'feeling of defeat' ....
'always feel incomplete'

You have expressed your emotion whilst also telling the story - nicely done!

I loved your ending! It really was a powerful ending. Well done!

Sorry for your loss. It's never easy losing someone, but losing a parent I think would be just awful.

5/5

Rest In Peace Dad
05/25/1970-12/26/2011

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I just realised..
The day after Christmas - that had to be super hard especially! But at least you had one more Christmas with him.

I agrre with alisshac everyone related

Your pain is evident... :-(

Sorry for your lose know how it is to lose your parents

Sorry for your loss, may his soul rest in peace, Amen. Loosing a dear one is the most terrifying feeling ever. Loosing a parent, no words can describe the feelings shattered. With all the pain, fear and despair, one picks up courage and moves on. Life will not be the same without the deceased but, living each day with their memories; keeps one stronger and knowing you're coping well assures them the peace they need in the beyond.. Penned purely from the heart, its lovely how you came up with such a tribute in the memory of your father. He'll be so proud of you, keep the spirit firm. Blessings to you, :) ...

I lost mine a long time ago, it still hurts 20 years on. This is a wonderful write, genuinly i loved it x