Comments : Seeking Shelter (collab)

  • 11 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Oh! Such a beautifully written story of life, hope, survival and struggles. Through the eyes and experiences of a daughter and mother. Very touching and real. You both did a job welldone with this.

    In life we at times find our destinies altered. Everything changing drastically for the worse. Nothing seem to be a smooth sail. It's hard to provide a moment meal. So 3 square meal you're deprived of, because its become a privilege. Streets, under bridges and corner kiosk are the shelter you know, than the normal houses. Clothings you don't have only yester years dirty clothes that have turned to rags. Hygiene you're far away from. All basic necessities you're bereft from. However, with all that, perseverance and a will to better your life lingers within you.

    No matter the hardship, hope, peace, a good life will come knocking and all the struggles for survival on the streets will be over. Nothing is impossible, just to keep a staunch faith and to believe a capricious course will happen in your life. Sad that her Mum died but she's hopeful that better times are coming someday sooner or later. Till then life goes on..
    Excellent!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Oh Sara this is a very touching piece. It really reminds me with mother and I do relate to it to the maximum extent. I really loved the last two stanzas the most. In my opinion this poem should belong to the sad category more than to the life category coz it includes tears. Well this is just my opinion. I loved your poem Sara, keep penning.