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Simplicity is the key in certain poems...I find myself searching for too much and loosing the whole essence of what I am trying to write about.

Larry, you just know too much.
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Love this senryu!!!

What I love about these short forms, is that you have to say a lot more in less words. You've done that here. I love the title - I think that was a clever word to use.

I like the concept of this poem... the idea that a jumble of descriptive words may not add meaning to enhance the understanding of a subject. It also reminded of when you're writing an essay or report and how rambling about unnecessary things is usually not going to add to the essay/report, other than the word count.

I love the simplicity and theme of this poem. Great job Godfather!

Most of the time, that's true. Choking verses with words and stuffing them with spicy thesaurus vocab can make you pass a lot of gas! It gets irritating to the stomach and eyes and tongue I mean. Instead of enjoying the imagery, one has to force himself to gulp the idea down his throat.

But in rare situations, what you wrote isn't 100% true. I am reading now A Thousand Splendid Suns, and Khaled Hosseini's style is so attractive because he describes a lot and adds so many adjectives just to make us define and shape in mind the settings and characters of his story. It's not pain in the ass to me!!

- Love this write. Always keep sharing those meaningful senryus - Rock On!

Did you mean me in this poem? Because I feel like this almost all the time.
I really love this piece Larry, the theme is very convenient to the form. Like you don't need many words to talk about 'words'.

Great write :)
Write on~