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  • 5 years ago

    by Hellon

    I actually really like this...honestly I do!...I didn't know anyone actually owned records apart from me but...it's a good idea! I still have heaps of records but nothing now to play them on haha!!!

    Anyway...back to the poem...you have a few little typos here but...I know english is not your first language so....look it over again...if you need some help pm me ok?

    I just loved the fact that...records sometimes stuck and you played well with that fact and...of course, every one had a B side which...generally wasn't the best but....you swung that around too....I really liked it!

  • 5 years ago

    by Dixie Sinoro Ebanit

    Thank you for the compliment. This is the first poem i wrote. I was very depressed when i wrote this. Can you please tell me what few little typos were you referring to? I'm open for comments and suggestions for my own betterment.
    Thanks a lot!

  • 5 years ago

    by Hellon

    It wasn't anything major....just your opening stanza that I would like to talk about...

    Mirrored memories
    and self-created fantasies
    stuck on replay
    shuffle my thoughts
    record the regrets
    and loop the pain

    I've just deleted the 's's....for your consideration. Normally I don't like all the I's you have here but....I think it works here....so...I wouldn't change them in this case.

    • 5 years ago

      by Dixie Sinoro Ebanit

      Thank you. I don't wanna elaborate why there was an "S" since you've mentioned that it works with my poem.
      Thanks again!

  • 5 years ago

    by William

    I see in a comment that you said this was the first poem you wrote. It's honestly an amazing start! I like the way it was set up.

    5/5 definitely

    • 5 years ago

      by Dixie Sinoro Ebanit

      That's correct! i just had the guts to create one because i was emotionally upset on that time!

    • 5 years ago

      by Dixie Sinoro Ebanit

      Thank you for 5/5 vote. I really appreciate it! I am now inspired to create more...

  • 5 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is creative and cute.lol. but your poem is great and amazing.
    Pls keep writing(: