Comments : Words Can't Do It All

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Here, I would rather see this is a homeless child of yours who's frustrated because he lost his track to home and is searching for the road.

    But I'm sure it's a bout a lover. And home is you, your body, your flesh, your mind....

    :D Rock N'Roll, Meme!

  • 5 years ago

    by Thomas

    WOW!

    Meme, this was awesome!
    I imagined you telling this with a soft voice.

    Definitely worth my nomination :)

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks guys :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Ole Carsten

    First line combined with last line makes a qoute of life. the wish to find home or guide someone home, and then the personal need to free, well done

    br
    Ole

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Meme, you have done it again. You have made my heart completely melt. <3

    I may be totally wrong, but the way I interpret this is.... that two people met online, talking and how you truly connected... you knew each others inside... and then by the end of the poem, you two finally meet and you are 'home' ... seriously beautiful and I think a lot of people will be able to relate to this!!

    Adding to my favs!

  • 5 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Oh my, I mean oh my gosh, this piece is phenominal. Nothing, no piece, ever has made me think so much about the truth unseen with words, no matter what those words may be or may mean. I'm amazed by the simplicity of this piece and its ability to leave me speachless. I ean it has taken me at least thirty minutes to try and write this comment explaining that it deserves more than a round of applause or an award of some sort. It is one of those pieces that as many people as possible should read. Its one of those pieces that you don't really see coming and that you're not really sure which way it will turn. It is creative. It is hopeful. It is sweet. And above all, I cannot find a single down fall to the piece. Not a single thing I am able to find that would need change. Excellent job.

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      Omg, thank you so much. Your words mean a lot :)

  • 5 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I tried to reassemble the beats
    of your heart, while you filled the
    missing parts of mine. Although
    we never met, never felt how it's
    like to be in the presence of one
    another you still knew every little
    thing that made me "me" and I felt
    I got you all..

    An excellent write..meme.

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    Congrats Meme!!

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      OMG!! I did not expect that at all!!

      Thank youuuu :)

  • 5 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Can't believe I missed this what an amazing write

    There is nothing else to say a worth winner

    Awesome

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks a lot :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Congrats! I love this piece. The diction you've used makes me think that this was written from personal experiences and it felt so overwhelming - as a reader - to read this because it felt like you just opened up; you simply let it all out. And sometimes that is what we all want to do; what we need to do, really. To perhaps, heal and move on?

    "Words can lead a strayer
    back home, but they cant
    fill the missing void buried
    underneath ones' flesh. It
    takes much more than that .."

    I'm not sure strayer is a word, perhaps stranger? The imagery and message here has a sad tone to it. It makes me think about these people who've gone astray. Sometimes we see homeless people or seemingly lost people and we can't just tell them to go home. Perhaps they choose to be astray, they prefer being lost, abandoned, forgotten because home doesn't feel like 'home' anymore. Beautiful start, Meme.

    "Then a path chained your
    world and mine. I thought
    you'd stray away at one
    point in time, but instead
    we both found a new form
    of addiction down that road,
    to be attached mind and soul
    to each other."

    This introduces hope. It also is quite romantic. Sometimes all it takes to be happy and keep away from depression is finding that person; the 'one'. I love how you wrote 'a path'. It shows that it was by chance that they met; coincidence. And it sort of made it all the more romantic, all the more reason and determination to keep that bond/relationship strong and alive. Sometimes those things make people want to hold on much longer.

    "I tried to reassemble the beats
    of your heart, while you filled the
    missing parts of mine. Although
    we never met, never felt how it's
    like to be in the presence of one
    another you still knew every little
    thing that made me "me" and I felt
    I got you all."

    Yes, strangers can oftentimes heal us instead of the people we actually know. Perhaps because we are afraid, or rather, dread what closer people to us would think/feel? Friends, families.. there are things we dont want to confess to them; things we don't really want them to know. fear of judgment, perhaps..

    "But then again words cant do it all."

    I like how you secluded the echo of the title. It made it more powerful; more impacting, more memorable. Perhaps this person tried to heal you with words as well. But they cant. At least, not this time.

    "Ithought you only wanted
    to be loved, to feel safe, and
    feel needed. But little did I know
    Oh how little did I know!"

    This is so lovely. The cadence. Repetition at its best. The tone, too. Very smooth and poetic.

    "It wasn't until in my arms
    when I held you for the first
    time; I realized that all you
    wanted is simply to breathe."

    There is realisation, and understanding in the end. Perhaps it was a lack of trust which slowed down the relationship at first. But now.. there is.

    I'm not really sure if my interpretation is correct, but I just get lost whenever I read this piece. It's beautiful. Keep writing.

  • 5 years ago

    by Darren

    Well done and congrats to one of my little club of awesomeness

    (just a made up thing in my head where you, POTP, everlasting and wildflower reside)

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      Awwwwww Darren thank you! You made my day, and you are just so sweet and wonderful you know that?!

      :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Congrats Meme...Such an exquisite piece.
    So beautifully penned.

    You deserve it, girl.
    xxx

    • 5 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks a lot Tara :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Missy this was an awesome write :-))

    Im so glad you won it was well deserved xx

  • 5 years ago

    by Lioness

    I can see why this won!!!

    Congratulations hun!!! I loved reading it.

    I could feel my heart praying that the two people who are meant to be together find their way to each other's arms. I was reading it and thinking this was beautiful and the words were heartfelt and true.

    Awesome poem hun

    x

  • 5 years ago

    by Meme

    Thanks a lot for the comments guys! I appreciate it :)

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Congratulations, buttercup!

  • 5 years ago

    by Nema

    Okay there is so much to be said about this poem, but again, words can't do it all, right? ;)

    I want to comment on many things but I just can't find the words to say them. It's like anything about words and silence leaves me speechless, because silence and words are always fighting to get to you, and you, being the battlefield, end up jaded.

    I love your opening stanza, I could read this poem over and over again just to get to the opening stanza in and out.

    Your poem felt so warm to me, I think I've written or read something similar, I'm not sure. But issues like these never get old, because everyone's got their own struggle with words. I guess we writers breathe writing yet words in most cases choke us.

    Lovely write sweet =)
    Shine on~

  • 5 years ago

    by Suyechha

    Loved reading this poem.

  • 2 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I remember reading this the first time round, I don't think even then I could appreciate how wonderful this write is, I love how it is so unpredictable and earnest, it is one of my favs from you and im so glad I was perusing and re-read it. You have such a natural ability to wreack havock with emotions in your writing.

    Such a great write :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I remember reading this the first time round, I don't think even then I could appreciate how wonderful this write is, I love how it is so unpredictable and earnest, it is one of my favs from you and im so glad I was perusing and re-read it. You have such a natural ability to wreack havock with emotions in your writing.

    Such a great write :)

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      I appreciate it when someine goes back to revisit one of my old pieces, I too went through it and remembered the feeling I had when writing it!

      Thank you Ben :)