Broken

by Rebirth   Oct 9, 2012


Dont act like an Angel
You've falling again
A little crack in the sky
Was all it took to make you drop
Your wings I taught was all white
Really darker than coal
How I bought it all
From your smiles to your tales
Wanting a ride in the sky
Just beside the angel
Oh wait, make that angel of doom

Now is your doom
You want redemption
But you are gonna get PAIN
I'm gonna let you drown in Mysery
I'm gonna turn away
And leave in your ears
What goes aroung comes around
As I break those wings of yours.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Aditya

    Wow, it's so amazing, great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by LostWords

    Small critique, you say, "Your wings I taught was all white" I am guessing that should be, "thought."

    Wanting a ride in the sky
    Just beside the angel
    ^^
    This line is interesting. It makes me visualize taking a ride with an angel. Very cool.

    The line "Now is your doom," that to me is a bit confusing. Maybe write it differently?

    Oh dang. That ending of yours...remind me never to get on your bad side! Great job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Great poem full of emotions, I this poem is so powerful and sad that it touches the reader emotions. I like the finality of this piece and the determination to allow that person that has hurt you to rot. Great write.....

  • 11 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Great poem full of emotions, I this poem is so powerful and sad that it touches the reader emotions. I like the finality of this piece and the determination to allow that person that has hurt you to rot. Great write.....