Comments : A Normal Day

  • 11 years ago

    by X Harlea X

    Ah, such a lovely poem Maple :) this was awe-inspiring to me. Gosh, I just can't say more than just Beautiful and outstanding job on this! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I love your tone here, made feel that you're comfortable after somethings going on, and the normal day that passes by you with the person you love:)

    Great job..

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Lost in a world of surprise,
    entagled in webbed finger
    points and regection,
    you wrapped illusions
    around passion, and
    called me beautiful.

    - great opening, spelling error: Rejection.

    I tasted the fire of
    your eyes and ran
    away with the sand,
    still moist between
    my toes, flavored
    each flirtation with
    a hint of lemon drops,
    as our kisses stood
    alone in the doorway
    after two am....

    - this is soooo soppy and romantic and I love it. It reminded me of the scenes in films where they do these things in the beach and the little kisses in doorways. i never hear about them in real life though, but your imagery makes it seem so real.

    our slumber is a honeymoon
    and it makes the reality
    of my love for you
    even sweeter in the
    shadows of a normal day

    - Aww that is beautiful, genuinely lovely poem and well put together.