Comments : Franken Scattered

  • 4 years ago

    by The Queen

    I have a hurricane spinning in my own mind,

    ^ I specifically love this line. What a nice way to describe your thoughts, wild and perhaps, controlling thoughts.

    I also love the whole poem's poetic flow. It was easy to read with not a single word misplaced.

  • 4 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Oh my word.....what an inspiration this hurricane has been to you. This was brilliant Andrea, seriously...soo amazing. I didn't find that you used new words, or unique metaphors as usual, but what you did do is pour yourself into this poem and you worded your poem EXACTLY how you were feeling. I could just tell....this is kind of mind blowing and so sad to read..I don't even have words to express in detail WHY I love this..but I do and I think its so worth nominating :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Andrea...I'm not even going to attempt to convey your emotions in this piece...you put them down in a way that just needs no explaining or disecting.
    You are a talent beyond words...in your way of adding creativity without taking away the importance of your words...just heartbreakingly sad...and totally amazing poetry.

    You are precious...you are a soul so sweet and a writer so amazingly talented
    xxxxxx

    Hugs and my love always
    x

  • 4 years ago

    by Hellon

    Everything about this poem is very honest and, although it's sad....I just love everything about it. The flow is perfect throughout and the wording is great without being sugar coated.

    A very frank poem indeed and I'm wondering if the word Franken has something to do with frankness? I googled the word but could only find a bunch of people with this as a surname haha!!!!!

    EDIT

    I just realised LS has a thread using this word but....I will confess...I don't know what it means?

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Thank you Hellon :-)

    "Franken" is short or slang for Frankenstein...

    They are calling Hurricane Sandy the "Franken-storm" and so I used the slang term for the title of my poem to help explain my feelings... :-)

  • 4 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Creative, as always. It is heartbreaking but I love how you've found such inspiration from a situation as such. Great piece.

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh Maple :(

    Sometimes there are just no words to say. This poem is so deeply meaningful and sad it really touches my heart to know it was you who wrote these words.

    The use of this great methaphor was very cleverly put together and made a poem as powerful as the hurricane itself.

    Thinking of you x

  • 4 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Maple, just read this for the first time. I am struck by your ability to project dark emotions in one's life. Your creativity using Sandy, the Franken storm in this poem is amazing, penning frustrations of everyday life of a caregiver so easily with your magical pen. I too am moved by this last stanza:

    I have a hurricane spinning in my own mind,
    wishing it would take me away forever.

  • 4 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Congrats my love!!!!!! This poem is incredible and Im so pleased to see it made the front page!

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Congratulations my sweets...this was deffo worth the win!!! xxx

  • 4 years ago

    by Karla

    A belated congrats sista.Great piece!

  • 4 years ago

    by Ares

    Wonderful piece! I liked the pace and precision of it and the closing line is a well-constructed finisher. Well done!

  • 4 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "At first glance I was unsure if it was the recent hurricane that inspired this, after seeing other comments I see I am not the only one that thought this. I found that I enjoyed how the author is able to use something so tragic to create such an emotional and moving piece of writing, and I did like the sublte alliteration of puffy palms.

    Whilst I enjoyed the thought of a hurriane in ones mind, I'm not too keen on the closing line, I just felt that it wasn't as emotional as the rest of the piece as I found it to border on cliche the way the author phrased his/her thoughts here.
    That was the only line I wasn't sure about in this poem, and I think the author did a lovely job at expressing their thoughts throughout this.

    Again, I applaud how something so sad can create such a beautiful piece of writing"

    :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderfully Penned, Congrats!!!

  • 4 years ago

    by Texas Battle

    Marvellous

  • 4 years ago

    by Stormy

    Wow...that's all I can say, wow.

  • 3 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Sad but heartfelt 5\5