Ebony Shadows

WOW! This imagery is are beyond amazing! Even though the tone is dark, you can't help but get lost in the metaphors. This reminds me of romantic period literature. It's tragic, but it's vivid and beautiful. I think the structure and the story balance each other out very well. While the style intrigues your senses, the story itself creates a sobering contrasts that reminds you of how ugly reality can be. Great work, as always, Saffie :)

I loved this Saffie...the metaphors here were amazing, and the use of diamonds was amazing, turning black and rocks and shards, all those words just added to the tone of the poem, and gave amazing imagery.

It really is a great write, and the message and story as well, watching someone change, lose there hope, sparkle, fall into a depression, and then not do anything...wow

Love this!

Firstly, this piece is just incredible Saffie. WOW!

Now here's why:

Your word choice and arrangement was absolutely terrific. Each word seemed to have its own poetic justice and then you paired them with others to make a whole page of beautiful, though sorrowful, description.

The metaphors were incredibly stunning - I love how you incorporated these with the use of cold, unyielding objects... rock, crystal, diamonds... You talent never ceases to surprise me. Though it has a sorrowful meaning that is described in detail with such emotion, it also is such a beautiful piece that the reader cannot help to smile at for the way its written.

Such detail has created clear and effectively transient images, that ultimately assist with the emotional pull of the piece.

"Ebony shadows" << remarkable. Love it.

An incredible write, Saffie.

Five/five

Your choice of words here made this poem intense. I felt like spitting each word out. I mean destruction-extinguished-degradation... they were so powerful and did so much for the poem without actually overburdening the context of the piece.
I liked the description. The transition of the imagery and events were clear and precise. I could easily imagine the crystal - reflecting, strong, seemingly indestructible and all.. then the 'destruction', until all that was left was an 'eclipse of a diamond'. and that sounded so poetic and creative. I also like how you used "who" in the end, personifying the object ever so slightly.
a little typo on secrecy.
Enjoyed reading this,

I hate it, when this thing happens, to just be watching someone going through something, and we just sit and watch, thats so hard.

Great poem though, I love it:)