Comments : Life Paintings

  • 4 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Don't have the right words to praise and such words don't exist to glorify your poems sister.
    However I'll come back and try and give my thoughts.

    This exudes blissfull serenity and its exquisite.
    Ofcourse. Nominated but exhausted my votes but next time I'll choose for sure....
    You're divinely blessed as a poetess! :-))

    • 4 years ago

      by Meme

      Hmmmm, I dont think this comment is for me, right?

  • 4 years ago

    by Hellon

    I really love this write you know! So much about it that appeals to me...

    You are not obligated
    to pick a brush and paint
    the dawn on my window
    every morning, because
    I. Can. Wake up without
    your colors.

    ^^^

    Great opening stanza...you're saying hey...I can take you or leave you be...really (in my mind) you hope for the painted dawns on your window. Have no idea why you have placed periods here... I. Can.

    Yes, I am aware of the
    the empty canvases you
    will leave behind, and I am
    certain my eyes; at first,
    will find it hard to stare at
    the albescent reflections.
    ^^^^
    A blank canvas is always a hard thing to stare at, even for the artist...some love it, and will observe it for a while....personally I find it intimidating!

    But I can assure you that
    I never lost my iridescence;
    I can still see the different
    hues of life. Maybe at some
    period of time you were my
    favorite painter, but that
    was then!

    This was my favourite stanza by far.... iridescence; a word I really like and..it's very well placed here to give further meaning to your thoughts/emotions....reminds me of a bubble...you know the colours are so abstract?

    --

    Here, I will even hand you
    a new palette; a new set
    of brushes, to explore all
    the other possibilities.

    ^^^

    Now you have drawn a little line before you have given us this next thought which makes me think you have made a decision?

    So go ... Just Go!

    Let your brushstrokes paint
    you -yet again- another road
    into someone else's life

    ^^^

    Yip..I believe my thoughts to be true...you're saying...I've had enough now....I really wanted a canvas that was covered in nice colours but...you didn't get it....or haven't yet.

    Loved it!

  • 4 years ago

    by Meme

    Ohh thanks a lot for thr comment Hellon. I always apprecitae what you thinkof my poetry.

    Now for your question of why I placed the periods in "I. Can." so the reader would stop after each period when reading it out loud and realize the emphasis of what I am saying, that I can really do it alone.

    I hope I explained it well :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Meme, In first thought, this seemed a little Cliche, in the fact that as writers, we use art in our poems alot, our writing is an art, however by the time I had finished, I changed my mind :) This is awesome, it is so creative, in how you painted (sorry, not intended pun there) the scene and how it flowed into the next line and such...I loved the strength and the attitude of confidence, it was very refreshing and such a nice way to say, Look I'm over you, ruin someone else, cos I'm not falling for it

    AWESOME
    X

    • 4 years ago

      by Meme

      You made me smile with your comment, Thanks a lot sweetie :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Chelsey

    OMG!!! Meme you know I'm a blunt person so when I come across blunt poetry I fall head over heels in love with them..

    This was actually sad for me to read I feel like this right now, I have lost my favorite painter so to speak, if only I can get myself to the place where I say so go, heres new paint brushes...go explore your options...its a hard thing to say really especially when they are already exploring and you feel as if you never mattered....

    This is really an admirable write from you girl...Adding to my favorites for sure, Im in love with this metaphor..Using painting as an example really "paints" a brilliant picture here. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    I loved this so so much. If one could marry a poem. I'll instantly do so right away by 1st starting to propose, the other way round, lol. Its quiet a unique approach to have used elements of painting as a metaphor. You incorporated that beautifully and you've done it immaculately.

    Life is like a paint. You can choose to paint what motivates you. Perhaps a view you love or an image in your mind. What drives your existence, a form of inspiration. You're on a threshold to follow your dreams and actualize it to fruition. That's the quintessence of having a purpose to live conforming to the divine theories of existence, individual principles and societal expectancies.

    Also you can choose to deviate from real painting to been abstract. A random idea, that'll just spring upon and spawn your thoughts. Such leaves you with no purpose but just uncertainties on what your aims are. To further thrive to succeed in all ramification even when all odds are against. To try out diverse opportunities that'll birth good tidings and new doors. When one door closes another opens. Trials doesn't mean the end of your livelihood and because you choose to wait for that divine intervention; doesn't mean you're giving in to laxity.

    All happens for a good course. Some abstractness can just be mere thoughts of comfort and nothing regards to vice. With patience, understanding, faith, perseverance and will to survive. All puzzles will fit and form into a perfect picture.
    So that's how i depicted the analogy of paint to life.
    A good read.
    Your best so far. *claps* :-) ..

    • 4 years ago

      by Meme

      Hehe, thanks Yakori! And yes, my poem would be more than happy to accept your marriage proposal :P

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    I seriously have no words to express how much your poetry means to me... Im at awe now.... you are an inspiration!!

  • 4 years ago

    by Max

    Congratulations Meme
    really nice poem =)

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    CONGRATULATIONS AND CELEBRATIONS!!!
    LOL

    I was sooooo happy to see this on the front page :) You totally totally deserved this win :)!!! Yay

  • 4 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Freaking gorgeous and worth the win!

  • 4 years ago

    by Meme

    Awwwww, thanks a lot guys :D

  • 4 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    Nice poem...! Congrats!!!

  • 4 years ago

    by zombiepikachu

    This really sounds like a slam poem. It has a great rhythm and I like the way it flows. The concept of this poem is so beautiful, and I only wish that I could create something like this! You are talented! c:
    Also, I love the emphasis you bring to certain words and parts. I feel as if the speaker of this poem is strong, and I like how that feels.
    Beautiful poem. c:

    -z

    • 4 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks a lot :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Clinton Hills

    Grate poem 5/5

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a brilliantly written piece - full of determination and anger even?

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Yes, and anger.

  • 2 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    This is brilliant! What a well written extended metaphor, beautiful imagery and emotion.

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks:)

  • 7 months ago

    by Purvi Gadia

    I'm reading this for I don't know which time, but it's, even now, brilliant. and excellent. and every word that can describe how awestruck i feel.