Comments : Womanizer

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I'm not sure why you put this in slang but...
    The poem itself was really in your face, it was so you...in its confidence and made me smile I must say.

    The flow was smooth and transitional, and the tone was sarcastic yet serious, and that last stanza had me in giggles, it was just so refreshing to read.

    As always Chelsey, you write effortlessly :)

    • 11 years ago

      by Chelsey

      Hmm I think the last stanza is what determined its category, and that was meant to be funny, yet serious! Glad you giggled :) lol

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Man I got so into this!!! It was invigorating! It was a you-tell-him type of poem and your character and confidence just make it clear :)

    I really enjoyed reading, your thoughts did flow wonderfully and my favorite parts (besides the ending) were the first 2 stanzas.

    "I bet you enjoy copying your words
    and pasting them on lethargic hearts.
    Get a new phrase, get a new motto,
    because you're making it clear that"

    - I can just hear the tone of voice in those first two lines. I also really adored the use of "lethargic" to describe hearts...I guess I don't hear/read the word a lot but it speaks power here, because these hearts are more than tired or drowsy...

    "you enjoy branding baited breath on
    the vulnerable lips of lust filled kisses."

    - alliteration ahh!! that image of branding someone just sends shivers down my spine- like ownership- taking over a woman and doing it in the name of lust.

    "but I'll go find
    a real man who wishes to only
    fondle mine and has a hunger
    for committed love."

    - Amen to that! What a perfect way to end it...I loved the soft use of fondle and just the determination. No one is going to take away your femininity or tear you down!

    Like Tara said, this was so extremely refreshing and I don't think I could get tired of reading it. Awesome :]

  • 11 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    Wow this is deserving of a 5 without a doubt.

    Great JOB! 5/5

    For the one with the larger boobs.