Awww... this is such a heart-felt poem that was really sweet until the end. I really felt the emotions you expressed here.
It made me really sad to read this... because everything seemed so perfect in the relationship that you wrote about here.
I just noticed a typo that you can fix:
Telling each other out --- should be "our" instead of "out"
I have a suggestion for this line:
"I remember we told each other forever "
why don't you change it to:
>> "I remember we promised each other forever"
I just feel like the word promise sounds better here.
I really enjoyed this poem <3 Great job!
5 years ago
by Burning Angel
Wow, this seriously gave me chills. there is so much someone will say to the other. and it always hurts when it comes to an end. maybe that is why many people will be able to relate to this. I love it, there was alot of emotion that could be felt by the reader!