Lol.

I want to comment on this poem, but-

I still struggle with breaking down a love poem.
(So, my apologies in advance.)

True to my style, I will however, note the line that really grabbed me-

"Firey passion of our love breeds light,
as the rising mood takes it's place in the night."

I like the imagery you had here, passion blazing into the night...

(Firey should be fiery though.)

This was good Harlea <3

I truely related in this poem but i cant write like this
you did a wonderful job keep writing

It's so weird how I really really dislike rhyming poems, but I have no problem reading yours. You can phrase the poem to not sound cliche' , your rhymes don't sound forced, your wording is always twisted into pure awesomeness, and youre still able to give me a sense of image and love with it...

beautiful poem girl, now I need to know who you are writing about :P

Really nice piece here Harlea, I enjoyed reading this, the flow was relatively smooth and I thought the rhymes were well incorporated without seeming too forced...the imagery was really gentle and sweet,

I enjoyed reading this piece.

x

Ooooooookay harlea this is one cool write :)

So its no secret im a sucker for the odd love poem here and there....and i looooove this one :)

You used some great imagery here and the vocabulary you use is really effective.....buuut...the rhyming scheme you use is really great it helps the whole piece flow and roll off the tongue, i like this piece read aloud ( i always read a piece once to myself and then once aloud) it has a great feeling when read this way :)

Great job!!

Very nice imagery to set the scene :). Nice rounding off of the poem- I always struggle with ends xD

Awesome poem.