Nocturnal World (Haynaku Verse)

by A Poets Handwriting aka ALISHA   Nov 21, 2012


Night -
mysterious menagerie
lambently lurking leerily.

By A.Sherden
22 November 2012
edited: 24 November 2012

*LTFR Club Challenge

HAYNAKU VERSE:
The Haynaku Verse Form, was invented in the 21st Century by Eileen Tabios, and consists of a tercet of six words, with the first line containing one word, the second line has two words and the final line has three words. Rhyme, meter and syllable count are all in the discretion of the author.

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  • Thank you Khalid for your thoughts, I will consider changing this.

    Thanks Amreen.

  • 5 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wow.... great attempt Alisha... I love your piece.... Good Attempt:)

  • 5 years ago

    by Khalid

    I loved the title! It speaks it all. The last line "lightly lurking lazily" is applicable but not to most species. Some animals do lurk in the night but not lazily. They find the appropriate chance to be as most interactive (for example, wolves and hyenas). Well, I like your idea and I'm not against it but the word "lazily" can fit for some (not all) species. It's your decision and you can ignore me after all, just an opinion.
    Great job.
    5/5