Young Poet's Society

by Andrew Packard   Jan 6, 2013


Young Poets' Society
(A Shakespearian sonnet)
Tuesday December 18, 2012 9:00 - 10:00 pm
by Andrew Packard
poem #63

Like a fighting army frontline we go,

Trudged on by time courage duty and will:

Brutal beaten shot at pushed down so low,

Against all odds no chance we press on still:

Desert of life draining our souls' aspect,

Whether in down pours of rain and hailstone;

Members threaded together by respect,

Mirrors reflect brilliance of minds outshone;

Memories of deeds performed by us proceed,

Highest records charted Poets success;

Open volumes of our work and read,

That's right we're better than the rest!

So long as these school walls are built to stand,

Young Poets' Club be heard across the Land ...

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  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Hello,

    Thanks for your comment on mine, I am also afraid to mistake the iambiac pentameter for the other one... it's hard to write it and to identify it. I think you did good on this poem, the flow is really good as well as the content. I do have one critique though

    On this lines I counted different syllables.

    Memories (3) of (1) deeds (1) performed (2) by (1) us (1) Proceed (2) = 11

    Open (2) Volumes (2) of (1) our (1) work (1) and (1) read (1) = 9

    Other than the above critique, this is well written. 5/5

    • 11 years ago

      by Andrew Packard

      OOPs! Your right! Poetry is HARD!

      That's one reason I don't like free verse, you can write anything and you can't be wrong. How lovely, its nice never being able to be wrong, but that's not Reality!!!

      This poem was written as an example to my students. I tell them that I would never give them an assignment that I wouldn't do myself. It was written in an hour, before bed because I had class the next day, so there's my excuse LOL!

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    This is amazing!!!
    Awesome poem Andrew, great job:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    You got it Andrew... and wow did you present an excellent Sonnet in my opinion! Beautiful!!!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Andrew Packard

    This is my first attempt at writing a sonnet. I don't know if I get Iambic Pentameter. Let me know if I got it wrong! Please.....

    I never even heard of it till I saw the movie "Henry Fool" Favorite movie now!

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