Drained

by Meme   Jan 18, 2013


Come take a look at my
deep wound; freshly cut
but it's not bleeding. It is
not because I ran out of
blood, it's mainly because
your knife is still buried
in my flesh.

The unsharpened blade
took its time to tear every
feeling I once had for you,
so I congratulate you for
signing this pain upon every
memory we shared.

But you know..

.. all I ask of you now is to
come a little bit closer and
stretch out your hand, not
to hold my weak body but to
pull out your knife once and
for all, and let me bleed out
your love.

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© Copyright 2013 by: gIrL
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  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a truly powerful piece - your words are so effective here "The unsharpened blade took its time to tear every feeling....."
    and "let me bleed out your love" are just two examples from a wonderful piece.

    • 8 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks for your lovely comments Ben :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Simply WOW!
    I love the beauty in your poems Meme. How differently have you expressed the pain of a loved one in your life, who like a wound has cut deep in your mind and soul and the pain does bother you, making you feel for that one all the time and have his memories still present in your blood. When I read this, I can feel the pain of a unsharpened knife which is always rough and very painful to slit one's body. And the ending you penned is amazing. It shows how need not want a life which runs with the memories of your loved one, which is like blood for your body and soul, you want to end it by draining the only thing in your mind and soul- your loved ones' memories and love.
    Keep writing.
    This is one of my favorite poem:)

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you so much Amreen :)

  • 11 years ago

    by dalllllal

    Wow just amazing

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Come take a look at my
    deep wound; freshly cut
    but it's not bleeding. It is
    not because I ran out of
    blood, it's mainly because
    your knife is still buried
    in my flesh.

    - very deep emotion of lost love and perhaps betrayal and longing for peace. I like the idea of the knife still being there, like you do not have the control or power to take it out so you are left with it inside you causing you to slowly bleed out.

    The unsharpened blade
    took its time to tear every
    feeling I once had for you,
    so I congratulate you for
    signing this pain upon every
    memory we shared.

    - the blunt blade is very powerful as shows how much pain you are in and how sloely it seems to be torturing you. It then begins to taint even the good memories because the pain you feel now is attached to everything that involves them so everything you remember becomes painful.

    But you know..

    .. all I ask of you now is to
    come a little bit closer and
    stretch out your hand, not
    to hold my weak body but to
    pull out your knife once and
    for all, and let me bleed out
    your love.

    - This is very vivid because we all know that by removing the knife now it will cause you to bleed out in no time. The blood will come pouring out and instead of asking him to save you, in a way you are asking him to kill you so that the pain will be over.

    Great work Meme xx

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      I know the imagery was so vivid in this piece, but it was kinda reflecting the emotions into this picture.

      And thanks a lot for the comment hon :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ugh....painful love is no fun to go through..this feeling is gut wrenching Meme..I felt like this once and its hard to get out of, but once the knife is removed we are free to live, and live healed....Don't wait around too long beautiful because sometimes they dont always take the knife out, sometimes we have to do it ourselves, painful, but worth it..

    Loved this!...nicely expressed.

    • 11 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks hon :)