I find this very interesting! I do love birds and what they can represent. (Freedom, death, etc.)
IÂ´m also drawn to the fact that the person this poem is directed towards always becomes a bigger, better type of bird and you describe very well the feeling of helplessness. (not how you spell it, hehe, but you get the idea)
As for the title, I guess you just sort of have to feel it yourself, I mean I could maybe suggest a few, but itÂ´s your poem and itÂ´s written with your ink. IÂ´m excited to see what you eventually end up calling it though :)
Saffie, this was such a powerful write. I love the strength of your comparisons and that stress & emphasis of the drastic differences between this person and you...how you could never rest easily or be at peace because you were somehow not as great as this person who would always trap you. What a story you told and I learned a lot about the birds and their meaning too :] Congratulations on the win!!!
This was very well crafted! I liked how you have used each bird, described them and weaved with a person's nature. It gives a very clear picture of a person who wants to believe in herself and fly free but is over powered by someone who is very domineering..sad and touching write.
A late congratulations from me. I've read this a few weeks ago, but didn't have time to comment. It is one of my favourites by you. I never thought one could use that much metaphor, similes, and create such beauty as this.
I like your poetry a lot but I cant help thinking how u might be using ideas from other poems and not your own ideas. however I maybe wrong and If I am I apologise. your work is on the way to been good but you have a way to go yet. keep up the writing welldone
I love birds and this poem is my cup of tea. I especially love the many different birds used to represent the changes and pressures you describe artfully in this poem. A poem that involves research, cultural belief and superstition to a degree.