Beggar's bowl (Haiku)
by zombiepikachu Feb 5, 2013
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11 years ago
by Rusheena
Yeah, my bad. I had to research it a bit, afterwards. Keep up the good work, Z. :)
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11 years ago
It's no problem! Thanks, you too c:
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11 years ago
by Rusheena
I'm not familiar with haikus, but I think they focus more on nature. I'd add an apostrophe on "beggars," but other than that, I think you did a good job. :)
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11 years ago
Thanks! C: I'll do that, because its supposed to have that there.
As for the nature, modern haikus do not need to be about nature. But, this one does have aspects of nature in it, and so I tried to incoporate it. But this one was supposed to be more modern.
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11 years agoby Shark Puncher
Sorry! I just meant in general.
I felt this one was pretty concise.-
11 years ago
Oh, it's fine. I'll look at them again. Thank you for the help c: I don't really like writing haiku's much though.
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11 years ago
by Shark Puncher
Maybe try to write them less abstractly? Or if abstract, maybe more themed? No idea.
I really suck at writing Haikus as well, as you might personally know!-
11 years ago
Hm, my point with this one wasn't to be abstract. I was merely comparing the cat to a mendicant beggar, such as like the ones of the Buddhist tradition. Maybe I should look at them again :c
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