You are a serious forced to be wreckened with
In poetry , you give 100% to every piece ,
I love your writing

You are a talent .

Oh wow. I trully love it. I love all the kinds of words you used. It's a masterpeice. Pure marvolious. <-- spelt wrong lmao!!! But trully very good job

Hannah you always have the tendency to prove that you're a superior poet who fits in position with all poetry measures. Thank you for the brilliant write.

The imagery here was very vivid, the flow was very well done, and the metaphor, at least the one i picked up on, was eloquently expressed though it would be awkward to go into in more explicit detail.

there were a couple things that i didnt like very much, but they are minor.
the first is that pretty much every noun has a colourful and powerful adjective attached to it. this is only detrimental because places that might not need these descriptors as much sort of... jade the reader to descriptions in other passages... to phrase it differently "if everyone is super, then no one is super". fantastic becomes the new mediocre.

lastly it seemed to me like the objects in the poem were a little too... edible. licks the air, sweet and salty, caramel sand, elixir... to a lesser extent i can taste the brine of the ocean... i think the only reason this bothers me is it appeals to my sense of taste predominantly rather than my sense of say... sight or hearing.

this being said it is still an amazing poem, very well written, and very immersive. im reaching for things that are helpfully critical. honestly even if you didnt change a thing it would stil lbe a fantastic piece of work.

OMG Hannah, excellent write. I love it

You seem like a Frost fan. The way you write about nature is intimate. I enjoy it. I'd like to see more in this style

Well, this is a truly unique piece. I am absolutely a fan. You've taken the sensual pieces and brought them to life inside the beauty of the ocean. Absolutely unique, and gorgeous.

From this distance,
the boardwalk looks like a mirage -
we are unsure if it's just our overpowering delirium
or if she left us cornered
inside the Bermuda Triangle.

^^THAT was great. A fabulous ending to a terrific poem. I love the personification of the water, as well. The title fits this, and it's so creative. Added to my favorite poems!

Simply beautiful! you write with magic :)

Titles that are written in a foreign language are always appealing to me...french...well just so sexy!

I didn't quite know what to expect here because...translated it means...a relationship of three but...the third party is the ocean..what a great idea!

You painted such a magical scene here..provocative but discretely so...I loved it!

Sexy with class I'd call this poem :)

Ce poeme est tres beau!

Mmm, I've read this so many times trying to find the right words to say but nothing is going to do this justice.

As we saunter across dusty planks,
the briny ocean licks the air,
inviting our tawny bodies
to dive into a menage a trois.

^^I love your use of adjectives all throughout this poem, dusty planks, briny ocean, tawny bodies, the pattern adds a lot of character as well as paints a more vivid image.

She pleads for pleasure,
intoxicating our lungs
with a sublime combination of
sweet and salty.

^^This feels sensual in a way, like I don't know if that makes any since to you, but it does as well as gives off a tension.

We smirk in mutual agreement
as we race betwixt bystanders -
ecstacy awaiting within waves.

^^I believe you mean Ecstasy. (:

Liquid velvet creeps
across our flushed skin,
leaving us panting -
surfing for round two.

^^Liquid velvet is such a beautiful description and the wordplay within the last line is clever. I feel like this entire poem is a wordplay, with many different meanings.

Eventually,
the cobalt sea takes us home.

The caramel sand tries to hitch a ride
'tween our wrinkled toes,
our towels are drenched with the sweat
of our elixir lover.

^^Not a big fan of 'caramel sand', I feel like it's a bit of an overdone word in this specific stanza. But even with it, this stanza is still purely brilliant.

From this distance,
the boardwalk looks like a mirage -
we are unsure if it's just our overpowering delirium
or if she left us cornered
inside the Bermuda Triangle.

^^I'm not a big fan of the ending though, I feel like it could be a lot stronger especially with the building throughout it. Like to me it feels incomplete in a way. Just the very end, I love how it starts out but it doesn't feel as strong as it could be. (Definitely just an opinion (:)

Hannah, this is seriously one of my favorite poems. It's beautiful and sensual and classy and lots of other words I could list off but don't feel the need because you probably get the point. I wish I had nominating power :/ Oh and I love the French btw, it ties in with the beauty and love within the poem.

My thoughts, this couple engaged in a walk through a boardwalk and they just let the boardwalk lead their love to who knows where, so the couple got lost in their love, when they realized it the boardwalk had taken them to somewhere unknown and hence the use of Bermuda triangle as well as the use of menage trois to imply the couple plus the boardwalk. So I like how you connected the triangle. I mean how you used the three of them and stocked to them towards the end by using the Bermuda triangle. But I got the message that a threesome only leaves people lost.

5/5

Excellent job, you know this inspired me! I love the imagery I had to read it over a dew times to soak it all in. 5/5

Good one Hannah, this one takes me back to the coast of my youth where every day was an eternity of endless experiences, and everything just seemed to run into one.