My Love, My Elizabeth (Sonnet)

by Maple Tree   Feb 23, 2013


Pale kisses invited a maiden's fear
Whispers madness, demonic possession,
Elegantly lifeless, devil is near
"Oh my love, my passionate obsession".
Yearning to devour sweet, blushing skin
Eyes of naked innocence laid to rest
Gazing silently in a moonlit sin
Tracing his finger around her soft breast.
Breathlessly carried away in his arms
leaving her spirit in a shallow grave
Stripping life and blood, with romantic charm
Becoming his ghostly prize, chained, love slave.

Hushing darkness, in the dawn of pure death
Waltz with me darling, my Elizabeth.

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  • 4 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    My first instinct when reading this is a vampire seducing this woman to become his new lover. I swear, when reading this...it feels like a movie! I can see them waltzing around the room, him whispering words into her eyes, hypnotizing her into a swoon.

    You're descriptive words always blow me away <3

    I love the sonnet! It works perfectly with this because, I always think of sonnets to deal with romance in some way. This is perfect because you have a little of the dark and eerie with love! <3

  • 4 years ago

    by Rusheena

    This read as if it was taken right from Shakespeare's collection. It's so elegant and classical, and everything from the rhymes to the imagery seem so effortless. I was intimated by sonnets and never considered writing one, until today. But this has inspired me to give it a go. Favorited!

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow Maple, very well put together. I find sonnets are usually very simply written with no need to read between the line sor study the poem, they become very clear and flow fast. This one I found to be very unique and I found myself reading back over previous lines getting different images. I also got different tones, not just darkness but of hidden romance, loss etc. It just seems to hold a lot more between the lines than what is said.

    Your wording is just amazing, I do not know how you do it. Very powerful, well done. xx

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Yes Luce, you are correct! It is about a vampire and his taken one- Elizabeth ~ I wanted to take that darkness and make it romantic ... in a deep, morbid, dark way.. I see sonnets as romantic...and that was the twist I took on this piece, thank you!

  • 4 years ago

    by L

    When I read this Sonnet my first thoughts were Vampire!

    how the vampire seduce Elizabeth and stripped her life plus blood. It created quiet a scenario where they are waltzing while the vampire seduces her... I loved that about this piece. Specially, to create a visual with a sonnet is pretty tough.

    Well done!

    Ps. I don't know if it was about vampires but that's what I thought.