A moment I wish to live...

A little bit different than what i'm used to reading, but i liked the style. It's fun reading and writing outside your comfort zone.

Wow I hope god fulfill ur wish

The determination here is almost astounding, theres a bit of sadness yet, but its like youve made up your mind and you know who is "The One". This is a moment im sure a ot of people wish they could do over, so many of us screw it up and spend a good portion of our existance scrambling to fix it... i know a lot of other have interpretted it as romantic and happy but when i read it i see mostly my failure along similar lines and it makes me sad.

still though, its ability to evoke that is impressive, and its still fantastically written... i can appreciate how succinct it is.

The 1st line reveals a superior start for the story, related to respiration.
The 3rd line represents the author's hope to find a chance as a lost person who exists without the beloved. This is so hard. This is also related to the title of the poem.
The last line shows how confident is the author as though saying "You are mine".

This piece is one of my favorites of yours.
I loved it.

I so love how you depicted your weakness in this poem. Such is the way of love, numbs your mind, cripples your thoughts, and takes you were you don't want to go. Good piece Amreen!

Keep it up. :)