Comments : Antithesis

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    Powerful piece. Don't think I am able to analise the metaphors/images here. I am sure there is more than my poor eyes can meet.

    • 11 years ago

      by Alexis

      Thank you for your comment Karla.

  • 11 years ago

    by Texas Battle

    Ouch! You are killing me,loved your choice of words."i will let you know when the stars get black",i wil be waiting to hear from you.Really wanna see the black stars,again,YOU NAILED IT.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Interesting and thought provoking images come to mind. I liked the mention of Lucifer and Venus in the same sentence..just an overall fantastic write.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sinclaire

    That's the other side of midnight
    & I will let you know
    when the stars get black
    & the ravens soar
    for i wasn't chosen to hide
    in your pit.

    ^ Love the imagery here, I feel like I could paint a picture using the stanza as inspiration, I like it a lot.

    that's the dark side of the moon
    & my wings have another name.
    i saw Lucifer and Venus;
    love has many names and faces.
    have you chosen your new halo?

    ^I like how you start out each stanza with a statement and go into detail of the statement in poetic wording.

    that's a brief explanation
    for our simple sins
    & i'm glad i can roll the dices again
    whether you want it or not.

    ^ This stanza makes me feel like this poem is about someone in your life that you once really cared about but are now pushing away for some reason and you feel resentment yet gratefulness that this person isn't such a big part of your life anymore. That's what I got from it.

    I do have a little critique though, regarding the '&' symbols. I think it would make the poem a bit easier of a read if you were to say 'and' instead of '&'. Just some thoughts. This is very well written.