Often I wish I could catch
the sunset in my palms,
for I'd let it slumber while
I daydreamed of the Pacific
cascading alongside coastlines,
how her speech was often slurred
as she breathed arctic-like air.
I'd shiver while wanderlust
captivated my senses, I'd tangle
myself within pearl sands and mint-scented
palms whose hair sprawled lazily like tourists
enveloped in utopia, all the while
you'd gaze at my beauty with
such love as I linger in nostalgia
of where we created ours.
Interesting poem and format. I enjoyed the vivid images and the over all content.
4 years ago
I think this is one of those abstract poems whose focal point is more on its imagery than meaning. It has different meanings, and I'm sure there would be different and varied interpretations from different people, as an abstract painting would. Another element I really liked was the tone. Although the sentences were a little too long for me, the line breaks and use of commas didn't make it overwhelming.
The first half, I could easily picture a vacationer (not sure if that's a word!) or someone daydreaming of going on a vacation, catching some rays perhaps, on a beach. The title also pointed to that as we often buy souvenirs whenever we take a trip somewhere; a memorabilia to take home to remind us of that trip or maybe give to someone back home. I also felt that the narrator seemed homesick. There's the contrast between th warmth of the sunset and the frigidity of the waves crashing onto the shore. I loved the personification of the Pacific. I've never thought of the waves breathing heavily, speech slurred as though drunk from the coldness. How unique is that!
The second half, I feel like I could relate to much more. Wanderlust is such a lovely word and I love how you used it. I can just feel the longing to travel, get lost for a while. Sometimes the strain of work and everyday routine becomes overburdening and we just need to get away. 'pearl sands' and 'mint-scented palms' are great phrases. Throughout the poem, I've had this picture in my mind of the persona being alone so the ending was quite unexpected for me. Took a few more reads to let it sink in. I enjoyed this, all in all. It's one of my favourites from the contest. Plus, the layout looks like a honey jar to me :)