I like the rhyme in here but this seems to be more of a tender poem that something slightly whimsical. Maybe that is just me. The rhyme kinda throws it off.

But I like rhyme. So yeah.

The second stanza is my favorite. Paints a picture in your head and it is quite nice.

I really liked reading this poem, great job! Two thumbs up

Hi,

I think the high point was the second stanza. As a whole, I think the wording was overally simple, and I think the end needed to be stronger.

Brad

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