Satirical (Senryu)

by Hellon   Apr 29, 2013


A razor sharp tongue
cuts deeper than any knife:
scars, unseen yet felt.

@Hellon 29th April 2013

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  • 3 years ago

    by Bobby M.Peter

    colon is there at the end of the second line,so you could say two or more words about the knife and separate them by comma. That is not a problem.Well done.

  • 10 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I love this title as it doesn't go with the poem at all as itis ironic. Haha. The poem is serious though but so very good. The first line holds so much imagery and mmetaphor. The razor sharp tongue can hold so many secrets like a real razor. It can cut deeper because of the secrets and promises you keep. Like your second line says it does cut deeper than any knife. It can breakhearts and make eemotional scars. Words are very powerful things as they can do more harm than good. I love the story feel leading into the last line because scars inside can shine brighter than scars outside. I love this poem overall as it holds such truth! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Kate

    Love it. Quick. To the point. Carries a good message.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Sometimes I feel like the invisible scars are much worse than any physical pain felt. Physical pain can be healed, but words that keep repeating in your mind that a loved one said sometimes never heal, just reopen at the thought.

    You captured that very well here. I love this form because it always packs a punch! Great job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Words can damage a soul far worse than a knife.. Powerful and true. I do love your strength in senryus.. You have a true gift for wrapping the message tightly in this small form.. love this!