Oh my goodness this is soooooo sad, I can't believe you can write so good, bravo!!!!

You're 13? And you wrote this? Well done indeed, such talent!

This poem is fantastic!! I feel so many emotions running through me as I read this... Sadness, wonder, and many more. I really loved this, your talent is certainly evident.

I absolutely love this poem it is amazing! I could imagine this whole thing!

May I say you have very good writing skills! I'm pretty sure many people envy you, you are very good at poetry.

Your welcome!

This is a great write, this poem is fill with so much emotions and sadness that it touches my inner feelings. I like the subtle rhyming and your choice of words. Sometimes we love a person so much that we are willing to do anything to have that person approval, but by subjecting oneself to the will of another is enslavement. The scary thing about becoming a slave you don't have a say, you are just there like you mentioned a puppet.

Great write...AL

Wow. you are an amazing writer. I love the emotion you put into them and I cant help it... you got major writing skills

I love the emotions you portray here as well.
I like the way you started out here as you paint a great picture. I think you are talking about your heart here. You are waiting for your love yet when they don't show up your heart hungers for them. They have taken over your heart and there is nothing you can do. You are powerless to love. I do love the way you describe this though. Love is a difficult thing to over come.

I feel that throughout this poem you describe that you are under a spell and as you say you are the puppet. And your heart only wants only one master. When you feel like you are in love for the first time but it can be the best feeling in the world. Every women can feel so magical inside. A charming no matter what.

You can't change anything on your life. You cant let anyone change you at all. You have to believe in yourself. Be who you are and they will truly love you. Ifyou loved with all your heart that is all you ccould do. There is nothing wrong with that. It is hard when you have to question your path though. Sometimes it is better to move on!.

I love how you started out the seventh stanza. There is a twist to it. The story turns dark because you can't take the pain away so you want to die because you can't take it. You regret everything you have went through. And you seem to be too far gone to be saved. I love I'm losing my mind line. As it shows ghe true emotion you feel inside.

I love emotion and wording of paper wings. You feel like you can fly but in the end life fails you and you come crashing down. Love kinda makes you the same way. You seem to fly so high but if it hurts you.... you fall. Your fear is great and normal. Death is a big part of a broken heart and the way you describe yourself as death is great.

The ending is great as all you want to do is move on. I love the emotions you portray here though. As always though father time will always heal. Great write! 5/5