Aww Amreen I just love this....I have to say, I did think it got a bit wordy and a bit lengthy to where certain lines or stanzas could have been taken out, but the over all piece as a really intriguing somewhat cute story!! Loved the talk to the moon, and the wink at the end..reminds me of a kid telling an adult a secret....showing trust, showing hope, showing affection, showing "you got this!"...I loved that...

Very visual poem, I could imagine the whole things...the person...the hut...the brightness of the moon..I see them peaking between their fingers....loved the description through out this!

Well done!

My mind got completely sunk in the story. The descriptive parts in each stanza made me insist to know the end of the poem. You spoke about very important elements necessary for life like trust, hope, fear of the unknown, love and respect between family members and affection between the kid close to a hut and an important element of nature, the moon. Of course it's unique to use the features of the silent but brightning full moon as a special unspoken language by the young kid. This reveals that the moon can hear but can't talk. The kid asked the moon so respectfully and with an endless innocence to shine the village road ratherthan the hut. I think this is called altruism. This revealed how deep is the love relation between the kid and dad.
Truly insightful message. I loved it and read it twice. You alwayays tell touching stories.
Keep penning.

Sweetie you're a great poet, I like how you bring your writings to life. This story is so sad, many children go days without seeing their parents due to their parents job. I love this poem, you've touch my heart with this heartfelt tale because this is a reality for many poor families. I absolutely enjoy this read, please keep writing.

Beautifully written....AL

Adi ends his one-way conversation
with the silent Moon
and covers his eyes
but peeps through the gaps in his fingers
towards the Moon.

^^This part is my favorite to see a little child peep at the moon through the gaps of his little fingers...priceless!

Overall, a heart warming and tender story to read and each stanza was very visual to..just like watching this scene on tv :)

Beautifully penned!

I seen that title and couldn't think of anything to use for it, but o.m.g... you have definitely done it justice! Kind of a "wish upon a star" but to the moon, asking for it to guide light upon the walkway for her father's return home late at night! Such a beautiful story!!

<3

This is a treat that would be a bonus in the pages of a novel

awesome