Your Most Treasured

by Poet on the Piano   May 15, 2013


I want to be your favorite smile,
the one others usually miss and walk
right past, but you'd walk a hundred miles
an hour into it [even though the stoplight
is turning yellow]

I want to be your favorite eyes,
the ones that you can't look away from
because they have cried in secret and
bled with unnoticed love [even though
no one thinks they have any depth]

I want to be your favorite name,
the one you can only whisper or sing
at the top of your lungs to the mountains,
for just saying my name would be too
commonplace [you understand the soulful
parts that make me Me]

I want to be your favorite heart,
the one you forever want listening,
the one who will not leave your side
when the hardest rain drenches and
the wildest hurricane fails to pass you
by [I will be here,

I am waiting, are you too?]

-
Wrote this 5/12/13 as a freewrite in class

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  • 10 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    The repetition here was quite effective.

    'Even though the stoplight is turning yellow'
    ^I loved this part, it was so unique I thought. Though me personally, would have probably used red instead of yellow. Yellow is moreso a caution whereas red is a complete stop, running red lights are much more dangerous and thus you would go the extra mile for them, putting yourself in the line of danger just to see them so they could see your smile.

    I think the mentioning of smile, eyes, and heart were moreso on the generic side, yet at the same time really that's just what we love when we're with someone. However the name was perfect. I so understand how amazing it is to have your lover say your name. They do indeed fall in love with saying it. 'Soulful parts that make me Me' yesss. Our name certainly speaks much of who we are as a person.

    This is beautiful & quite dreamy. Well done! :)