A lot of good imagery in this. The use of language is what caught me but It took me a few reads to fully understand it as you used a lot of big words lol.
I like the idea of "Arcadia" could it be an idea of a heaven?
At first I thought this shouldn't be in the love section as its not your typical love poem but after a few reads I think I can understand why you put it under love. I like the fact that it kept me guessing.
IMO the first 2 lines were the best and its what kept me wanting to read more. Again good imagery
Overall a well written piece that flowed well.
keep it up!
5/5 from me
This poem is just pure romance. The paradise is the two lovers joining as one, completely wrapped up in each other...a really sensual and passionate piece without being explicit, very lovely.
The imagery you two created is beyond amazing, great word usage though out. I loved shadows melding and the butterfly kisses.
A wonderful collab, you both meshed really well together to create a very well blended love scene. :)
5 years ago
by Tara Kay
Together, you both write really well,
I wasn't overly keen on the lack of punctuation, had to read through a few times to get it to flow but when I did, I saw that together you mesh really well...you fit together with the tone and wording...
This piece is beautiful, and romantic, the sensuality is just right, without being too over the top...