Timeless Tumbleweed

by Hannah Lizette   May 31, 2013


And as you hitchhiked between
forlorn lamp posts and
sooty saloons,
scouting for
a twirling parasol -
I peeled your name
from ghost town sheets.

Lastly, I doused the
embers from our photo-booth
with a drop of kerosene;
wore a postcard as a pendant
and became a timeless
tumbleweed.

Copyright 2013: Hannah K.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Piogga

    Great use of alliteration once again. The sound of "sooty saloons" is marvelous. On the same line though, might I suggest dropping for to the next line? I think the sibilance would be used to its full advantage, the hissing sound giving the effect of the abandoned venue, pausing before the next thought is presented. But maybe it's just me.
    Moving on :) ... I love how you opened up with the conjunction, and. It felt like entering a theatre in the final scenes of a play, not knowing what previously happened but being engrossed by the events presented before me.
    The idea of wearing a postcard as a pendant was just brilliant. It seemed our character was ready to move on (or has moved on) as she put up in flames the memories, taking just one tiny moment to keep forever.
    Unique phrasings in the entire poem. Lovely work.

  • 10 years ago

    by Keeper of the Gates

    It feels like Alice in wonderland in psychopath mode...

  • 10 years ago

    by Keeper of the Gates

    It feels like Alice in wonderland in psychopath mode...

  • 10 years ago

    by zombiepikachu

    I love how fleeting this poem feels -- the flow of it is beautiful, and very serene. The diction is very fitting to the poem and I feel as if you did a beautiful job. C:
    Keep writing!
    -z

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Hannah, I read your poetry often but don't always comment. This is because though I find your poetry beautiful, I don't always understand it.

    So I may be completely off with what I took from this, but I'll try to leave a comment that makes SOME semblance of sense :)

    Your opening lines make me think that someone is completely alone, that they are ever wandering, lost in the depths of despair and searching for a way 'home' so to speak.

    "I peeled your name
    from ghost town sheets."

    ^^ I LOVE this. The use of "ghost town" immediately brings me back to my initial thoughts of the opening lines and connects the whole stanza together, all the while keeping the imagery flowing.

    The next few lines remind me of a lost relationship. Perhaps you are eradicating pictures, memories, of someone whom you once loved deeply?

    The next few lines then, create conflicting thoughts for me, somewhat of a paradox because of the mention of timeless immediately after my prior thoughts. That's a good thing, however, as it leaves me free to ponder on the deeper meaning behind your words.

    I do so love the last lines, I thought you tied the poem together perfectly, and my favourite part would have to be the imagery you seem to so effortlessly create.

    Lovely work, as always.

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