Comments : Renewable Resource

  • 10 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    Wow. This is probably my favorite poem from you that I have read. Sometimes we all feel like we dont know the place where we live. I love the memories you potrayed of the unmade brd and the mirror. These are grwat things we never want to forget. Words cannot be taken back and we have to mean what we say. Beautiful 5

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Wow is the first word that came to my mind!

    And your ending breaks my heart. You have such a bitter voice at the end yet trying to tell the truth, accepting nothing else because this is what you realize. I do agree words, ideas, so much of what we do is reused but that doesn't mean we aren't creative or have hidden meanings....

    bringing in those four words though, a promise for a future full of commitment and love, and then thinking they no longer hold what you thought they meant, that just struck me. So much emotion in this piece! I just felt this sadness flow down as you admit you feeling like a foreigner in your own house and restless. That would be the scariest thing to realize- this house does not hold what it used to and now it is full of bits and pieces of the past.

    The images and rawness of them were amazing here. Loved the way you structured this too, just those few stanzas hold a life story that really express the whole idea of "words are not a renewable resource".

    Just wow. Beautifully and painfully expressed Hannah..... take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I'm not sure but it seems like either this person passed away suddenly or something caused you to break up with him.

    I'm thinking that maybe, he left and now parts of him are still around, and remind you of what was and that hearing those words from someone else is different or hearing them from him again doesn't touch you like it once did.

    Its true how the absence of someone in our home changes what we knew and how hone does t feel the same without them.

    I really enjoyed this piece, it's so unique and has many thougts it expresses to me.

    Really powerful and well penned write as always Hannah xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Meme

    @_@

    OOOO
    MMMM
    GGGG

    You saved all this talent for your 100th havent you?!
    This is beyond what I imagined when I read the title, and it is so true, same words can have so many different meanings depending on where, how, or to whom they are said! You nailed the meaning behind this piece, you nailed to express the emotions you had, you nailed the images .. the flow .. the word choice, just everything! To me this is going to be a new favorite from you!

    Nominated on Monday for sure <333
    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Beautiful and I agree...my pastor said once "You give words life when you speak them"..they cant be taken back so I understand exactly what you're describing here.

    I loved the metaphors in this piece, you do a creatively good job with them always.

    The sadness is so heartbreaking here because break ups or lost love is so tough to go through...

    Loved the detail in this piece...well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wow Hannah! This is incredible! I must say I loved this piece for the profound message it holds. The imagery is immensely lovable and I loved the end, very true!

    Just loved this!!!!

    Keep writing:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Britt

    I feel myself wanting so much more of this poem, how dare you end it! :P

    I seriously loved this. The tone obviously heartbreaking, and it makes me wonder whether this person left you by choice or accident (death?). I would assume by death because you still have their things. It breaks, breaks, breaks my heart. I can't even imagine. I don't think this is something you've gone through, but you've pulled emotion and images in a really incredible way (as always).

    I really love this poem!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Piogga

    Your literary works are without a doubt high quality. Inspiring and I keep coming back for more.

    Great opening. I find it appealing when a poem is opened up with an analogy as it shows a writer's creativity and kind of imagination. It also gives us a nice image in our heads as most writers use concrete imagery. It's probably my favorite part of the poem too. Second stanza shows the grief and you know the gravity of how much you love someone when you can't go one easily without them. I'm not sure if the ending was on purpose, written directly to the point, abandoning the imagery you started off with. Maybe that's why you've separated it? The first time I read this, I didn't quite like it because the message is common or maybe it's because I've heard it too many times before, but as I read it over and over again, it seemed apt and a good conclusion, a good decline from the "will you marry me" climax, which was extremely heartbreaking. Enjoyed this, in all, Hannah. Continue writing! x

  • 10 years ago

    by Britt

    Judging comment:

    "This is one of the most emotional and heartbreaking pieces I've read in a long time. My thought automatically takes me to the subject experiencing a death, and while I've never experienced it in this sense, I felt overwhelming guilt and grief. The images of wearing the shirt and ciggarette butts just hurts to read. It really reminded me a lot of the movie PS I Love You. I really like the structure here as well.. usually when you get so into detail in the emotional side of a poem, you can lose the poetic devices, which is definitely not the case here. The ending here is what really solidifies the pain for me. So many people propose, every single day.. but it'll never hold the same meaning here. How could it? What a beautiful poem!"

  • 10 years ago

    by Pantero

    I think that this poem was very true. love is not a renewable resource. I wish it was but the truth is its not