Comments : Waiting

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    It's the waiting that is the hardest part, not knowing, but hold on to the thought that someone is guiding your father towards a good result/outcome...

    Hugs and love.

    xx

  • 4 years ago

    by Meme

    Indeed, nothing mates with silence at all!!

    I love this <3

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Hey Andrea, keep holding on.... we are all thinking of him and I hope you get news soon to stop this anxiety and just know what will be next.

    Such powerful verses! You expressed that open wound of being restless, needing to hear something, aching for an answer.

    Take care <3

  • 4 years ago

    by Hellon

    It's been a long time since I visited your poems Andrea and that is simply because I only comment if the member is signed in at the same time as me and..you have been lean on the scene these days?

    Seconds tick, tock
    in catacombs of nerve
    twitches, aching my
    heart for news of
    something,

    This sounds very oldy worldy to me and..I think this is your approach but..I think..if you put the word is after aching it would sound better?

    but nothing mates with silence,

    ^^^^

    Brilliant line...love it!

    sitting here in restlessness
    I wake the sun for messages

    ^^^
    something missing here I think? I just didn't get this part and maybe you should consider rephrasing it?

    that goddesses hold sacred.

    It's a lovely write any obviously it came from your heart...I wish I had time to talk to you more but...going overseas for a bit...will try to give you more input but...it just caught my attention for now...

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    MT, this is indeed a short yet to-the-point write.. I have read your posts recently and your anxiety and restlessness reflects in this poem. All will be well soon:)

    Stay strong!!

  • 4 years ago

    by Britt

    My heart just swells reading this piece. I think so many people can relate, but thankfully you got (good) news! :)

    I love the line "but nothing mates with silence". So beautiful. This was one of your more stripped down pieces and I LOVE it!

  • 4 years ago

    by Abed

    Love it :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Congrats on the win!!! Beautiful poem that touches the heart for sure.

  • 4 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Congrats Andrea on the front page win xx

  • 4 years ago

    by Henry

    A superb writing!

  • 4 years ago

    by kim akemi

    Good one

  • 4 years ago

    by Karla

    This is precious!

  • 4 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Congrats on the win.Silence is the biggest gift to attain....
    beautifully penned.....
    Take care.

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This poem is very stunning and beautiful. First of all the title I feel fits perfectly. You are waiting for " bad news" and waiting is always the hardest thing to do. So the first stanzas writing is beautiful. I can imagine your heart beating with the second of the clock. As time ticks down and the more you wait the more it hurts. I like the phrase "nerve twitches" as well. To me that is saying that every time you hear a sound that you nervously twitch or move because you are scared to hear any news.

    I love the ending here as well. You pen your words well. Nothing mates with silence. That is very true. I think here maybe you have been waiting all night and no news has come and you remain silent all that time. restlessness is a nice touch here because throughout you give the feeling you are uncomfortable and now that you have to wait it makes you restless. The last two lines are amazing. It tells me the again you wake up with the sun and want to know what happens. Overall. You paint such a strong picture with such few words. Well done.

  • 3 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Short but somtimes less is more good job my friend 5\5

  • 2 years ago

    by PAUL HEWSON

    But nothing mates with silence,

    woooo that made me cold ... 5/5

  • 2 years ago

    by Bayan

    Wow! :)