Of Breath and Death

by Natalie   Jul 26, 2013


Do I need to breathe?

Could it be that your death has awoken me?
Did I live in a dream of hope and certainty?
A fake life composed of denial I created, just to be?
Oh intricate mind, I am overrun by complexity.

I forgot to breathe.

One moment you were here, the next you were gone,
A notion too complicated for my mind to consolidate.
Unnatural death resounds as I, weak, strive to go on,
Unable to reach understanding as much as I contemplate.

I cannot breathe.

Could it be this is what you wanted? That you saw the end?
Travelled through your path unsteady and unacknowledged?
I apologise if I failed you, I'm sorry I couldn't help dear friend,
I was always here for you, although too much was left unsaid.

I don't want to breathe.

I reject continuation. I refuse to live this life, without you, alone.
Imprisoned by grief, how can I be expected to function ably?
God, my Lord, how is this something that you can condone?
Allow evil to prevail, the good die young and leave sinners in agony.

Please don't let me breathe.

How can I possible continue with the insignificance of life?
When all I held sure, certain, secure has left with you?
Friendship too slight a word to depict the experiences of our life,
You were my sister, as good as blood. Nothing could be more true.

Breathe, breathe, breathe.

Words to a paper are so insignificant to reality.
You were too beautiful a soul to capture with words,
You brightened my world, so full of your colours,
And I will miss you every single day of my life, fiercely.

Rest In Peace Louise. 16/08/85 - 03/07/13. Gone but not forgotten.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Lemon

    I love the almost repetition! The questions are great as well, however you do seem to have quite a lot in there, maybe try to use them more sparingly to give them more of an impact? Just a suggestion :). Love the poem overall though!

  • 10 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    Wow. Fantastic, I'm breathless.

  • 10 years ago

    by safachan

    It would be my pleasure to be the first to vote and gives you my opinion .
    "Could it be that your death has awoken me?
    Did I live in a dream of hope and certainty?
    A fake life composed of denial I created, just to be?
    Oh intricate mind, I am overrun by complexity."
    god , the way you describe the denial and the impact of receiving the news of death is brilliant , you know like the state of being unsure of one's death and thinking this is all just a bad dream or maybe we r stuck in an evil conspiracy made by our own mind . beautiful

    the poem is too good for me to interpret but i would like to say that , i have captured the image of suffering and agony you were trying to deliver and it's painfully amazing.

    one more things i absolutely loved in your poem is :
    "
    Do I need to breathe?
    I forgot to breathe.
    I cannot breathe.
    I don't want to breathe.
    Please don't let me breathe.
    Breathe, breathe, breathe."
    these few lines between each part expresses pain and agony in a way i can't describe , that sorrow and choc , knowing that someone precious to us died cannot be put to words yet the essence of the endless suffering inside was beautifully expressed . you know like the difference between the inner and outer mind , when you are in a state of a denial , the things you say and the things you want to say aren't the same , it's a war inside and you are it's only casualty .
    i would like to say it's an honor for me to interpret your poem and i am sorry for my poor ability to express things right , but do know that you don't need people to tell you that things are to be okay , it's up to you to believe it and embrace it , and i am sorry for your loss.

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