Comments : A Time

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Wow, Taylor... I have to say this is beyond a doubt my favorite from your collection. I'm really impressed with it.

    The first stanza describes loneliness... how sometimes we barricade inside ourselves, feeling misunderstood and lonely. We have to keep ourselves afloat by saying we are okay, even though deep down we know we aren't.

    Burning bridges is a little overused in poetry, but it really works here. I understand it as the burning bridges from friends... cutting ties with people that maybe aren't good for you. I like bitter rainfall, too... showcasing the bitterness within and also towards this "familiar voice".

    The second stanza is my favorite. The mention of lumps in both of your throats...trying to control from sobbing. That's one of the worst feelings in the world to me... you captured that very well.

    I LOVE the measurements of adding the one part white lies, two parts truth and a dash of love and vinegar. Seriously, that's beautiful and I can't stop reading it.

    This second part is there is a time for sorrow... that sadness is evident in life, in relationships... there is always a time it will show up whether you want it to or not, no matter how many lumps in your throat you have or the pressure in your chest... it will release eventually.

    "But when we look through the rain -"

    --You know, this is a simple line, but it held so much imagery for me. I can see you two standing at the window, or maybe even on a porch before it's time to say your goodbyes... just staring out at the rain, not really knowing what to say but knowing this is the end of your chapter with this person.

    But even though this is the end, it has hope... that someday there will be a time for happiness once again... just all a matter of time.

    Adding to my favorites! <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Lemon

    I wish I could actually put into words how great this poem is. Sadly, I can't, my mind has given up for the night so I can only manage this measly comment (apologies).

    This stirred up a lot of emotion, from nothing as well. It's not relevant to my current situation (though I can of course relate to parts of it, as I'm sure nearly everyone can), and yet it still hit me deep. You just word it all so beautifully.

    "we turn inside
    for quiet consolations
    saying to everyone who isn't around
    but mostly to ourselves
    that we're ok
    just ok
    just to hear a familiar voice over the sound
    of burning bridges and bitter rainfall" that is one of my favourite parts of any poem that I have read on this site.

    Definite 5/5, a lovely piece

  • 10 years ago

    by Angel

    Wow this poem is incredible. it left me completaly and utterly speechless which is a very good thing. ive only ever said that about 2 other people. this piece is a literal work of art and im in love with it. i am so used to poems that rhyme but this poem doesnt need it. the words just flow and you can picture it in your head which is a very beautiful thing. i give it a 5/5 it deserves more but they only let us go up to 5. its a very beautiful piece. please keep writing

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wow... This is amazing! I love the truth in your poem and the profound meaning it carries. As angel said, it really has a flawless flow which brings out a beautiful imagery of the message you want to share. I find this flawless and awesomely amazing!

    Keep writing more:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Gwen

    I love the intensity of this, it have some great imaginary moments.

    "When skies cry and we turn inside
    for quiet consolations..."

    My favorite part is

    "...one part white lies to two parts truth with a dash of love and vinegar"

    a great way to put it.

  • 10 years ago

    by L

    Odd, odd, odd. . .

    Not the poem

    rather that I feel that I have read this before haha may be I read this poem a day ago and I don't remember.

    I like the the ending the most. I seriously feel that I have read the tone of voice in this poem before, but I can't put my thoughts where... it's enchanting

    Anywho, that doesn't matter. I found the line about

    " one part white lies to two parts truth with a dash of love and vinegar" to be the most original of the poem. It really stands out, I also like the ending, I think I mentioned that before. In my opinion, there's a time for everything so that's another part that I like about the poem that I can come up with my own opinions. The image that I got from the poem was interesting one too.
    The burning bridges and the bitter rainfall?

    Two thoughts jump to my mind, either this someone burnt the bridges... and hopes to hear a familiar voice to reach out to him/her... while the bitter rain falls... in hope for someone to save him/her...

    Or the burning bridges and bitter rainfall are used as metaphors for relationship with someone and also for cries.

    Well done

  • 10 years ago

    by UtterlyAlive

    Wow, after reading this I read it again, and again and again. Not only does it flow beautifully but it also paints a vivid picture in my mind. The meaning is deep, yet simple to understand. This is definitely my favourite poem on this site so far. It's amazing, honestly. In fact, I was wonderingly if I could use this to recite in our poetry unit at school, I know school hasn't started yet but every year they make us do the same thing haha.

    • 10 years ago

      by TSI25

      Go for it, be sure to give me credit though :P

  • 10 years ago

    by UtterlyAlive

    Thanks! And I will :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Love Fallacy

    This was a really interesting piece. I enjoyed how it flowed so much I read it out loud over and over again. I really enjoyed this line

    "When skies cry and we turn inside
    for quiet consolations"

    I don't know what it is about that line, but it is just really nice.

    Great job and keep em coming.