Comments : Nothing More Than A Mistake

  • 5 years ago

    by Daylight Lucidity

    I love this. Full of emotion, you can really see the pain. Nicely written.

    • 5 years ago

      by Angel

      Thank you

  • 5 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I do like this title a lot because it shows what you are feeling. I don't think the heart ever makes a mistake though. When you feel like you are in love the heart is the first one to know it. I love how the lines do flow together too because it really does tell a story. I love the beach too because there are so many memories that you can make there. You say you still love this person. But it feels like here you are trying to move on. I get that feeling because they hurt you but love does try to stay no matter what. But time does heal all wounds.

    I love the eyes thats the first thing I look at in a person. I do love the two connecting lines though. You fell in love with their eyes but you dont want to see them at all. I think that was a very creative wording. Memories are very haunting good and bad. When you are in love Ithink you always think of the good first bbecause its easy. Its easy to get swept up in the idea of having someone there fir you no matter who they are.

    The rain is a nice touch here too. It brings imagery and a deeper meaning to what the poem is. In my mind when I read about rain I think about sadness. You are drowning in tears and your depression. That is just what I think. I love how you played God into this poem because he puts us with another person for a reason and you really loved this person. No one is ever a mistake.

    I love this poem as a whole. You have done so well in the elements you used. You went from hope to sadness. Well done. 5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Love Fallacy

    I really like the ending. I mean its sad but very powerful

    "How come this feeling is so much more than an ache, Cause to you I'm nothing but a mistake"

    The word mistake really hits me hard and can make the reader feel your pain.

    Nice job