Comments : My burned out light

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachit Bhanage

    Well, I really got lost in your writings, indeed a reflection of your inner pains and your innocent affections towards you loved one !

    The journey is well-described, in a desciplined writing formats(paragraphs maintained). Was simplified to read. It can be even made better if you further add some expressions and exclamations & punctual mark. The language you used is quite simple and solved.

    Pardon my theories and literature,
    Apart-
    There a better Tommorw Waiting, Do you know what ? Nor do I know !
    Live To Live It !

    Appreciated,Would love to read more..
    But Next time a Joyous one ! ;)

  • 10 years ago

    by Black pearl

    My very first expression after reading this poem: wow;
    as you talked about each and everything you felt, so well.
    Though it was long(you could have stopped it in few stanzas) yet rhyming did so well.
    But the bonus part was the use of short stanzas - so quickly to read and didn't interrupt the flow- I loved it.
    sis