The Next Time

by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-   Aug 23, 2013


The next times you'll see me I'm gonna be on his arms,
Looking up into his warm eyes,
Leaning on his inner strength instead of mine,
Somehow walking in the clouds,

The next time you'll see me I'll wear a smile,
A crown on my head,
& a man that loves me on my side,

The next time you'll see me I'll wear a diamond ring,
A white gown framing me,
& a priest saying "You're now man&wife",

The next time you'll see me I'll be a mom,
A daughter who will hug me tight,
& worry about her nonstop,

The next time that you'll see me I'll be a grandmother,
Seeing my daughter all grown up,
Little children running around the house,

The next time you'll see me I'll be in black,
Mourning the death of my beloved,
Holding our memories close inside my heart,

The next times you'll see me I'll be dead,
Flowers upon my grave,
Being with my husband once again,

The next time you'll see me I'll be around,
Here&there you'll never know,
Because the next time you'll see me...
I'll be YOU!

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  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brilliant - loved the way you chronicled the way your life would go - and the end's superb.

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Hi,

    I like how you have a theme going on here, a repetition of the line "the next time...". I would suggest writing "the next time you see me" as it sounds better (in my opinion) than "the next time you'll see me".

    I would also suggest writing out "and" instead of using the symbol "&" to make it look more professional.

    First line: "times" should be singular.

    Your voice and tone stands out in this, almost like with the closing lines, you are reminding this person you lived a full, well-rounded life and did not succumb to disappointments or rejections. It would be neat if you could give the reader more detail and imagery with the lines about marriage, and raising children, instead of "telling" the reader and explaining, try to "show" more.

  • 10 years ago

    by broken sword

    Wow i have no w0rds u have captured a whole dream life and death very nicely . .during reading this poem i imaged every th0ught n m0ment..i am thinking if our dreams becme realty we will never wish for anything else. .
    Very nice p0em ..

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