Comments : Spider Spider

  • 10 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I think this poem is really cute and funny. The second line of the first stanza has a little typo. Ou should be you. Thats the only flaw I see.

    I think that a lot of people are scared of spiders so you are not so alone. But I like the simple writing in the first stanza You are scared but its great to write about. I love also how you give the spider a personality as they are human. I love the paranoid feeling they give you as they dangle from above. I love how in the second stanza your fear is starting to show and your emotions are all over the place. I loved the ending most though. You decide to save the spider and that is a wonderful feeling. Both personalities shine through. 5/5

    • 10 years ago

      by Biancas Veil

      Thank you
      I will fix that error up :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Alanis

    I like this poem, describing a fear or passion always makes the best poems

    I like the repetitive word at the begining, it adds emphasis. This paints a visual picture, swaying to and fro.
    I love the use for the word implore. I like however you depend on this guy to help you conquer your fear.
    I totally agree with the last line.

    This all in all is a very cute poem ^^ my only Critique is that I think by adding a few more descriptive words would make this poem exceptional

  • 10 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Lol funny spiders are awesome great poem 5/5

    • 10 years ago

      by Biancas Veil

      Spiders are as scary as hell! That's why I have snakes lol