This was a great poem. I really liked the whole story here and that is what kept me reading. I also loved how you depicted how the the vampire seemed like he wanted love but with his curse it would only allow to feed. It shows such a conflict in his life and I really enjoyed it.
Wow.. I dont really know what to say. this poem really took my breathe away. I love it. It feels as if he wishes he would be able to control everything that he is doing, and you easily keep the reader wanting to read more just by explaining how he felt as well. You used alot of imagery, it really helped keep my attention. You done a great job!