Comments : Beauty Never Fades

  • 10 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Very different, rich bank of words in here!
    you've kind of painted with words, it is beautiful and imaginative.
    IT is unfair not to say that it's different from the norm nature poems, as this one has its own perspective of "nature", the way you connected beauty, children, ..fox..etc..there's something smart about your combination.

    I am in love again with your closing line, you do not sum up the poem, as people usually do, instead you left a recommendation..well sort of; I love it, and I will say that this poem is a wake up call for everyone.

    with that said, I think you should take another look regarding the punctuation, especially in the starting stanza, the flow is disturbed by the lengthy sentences that would have a great rhythm if organized with punctuation...

    and "it simply" should be, "they simply" as you are referring to both "beauty and innocence" , and in this case you have to take the "s" off the end of hibernates.

    great work.

  • 9 years ago

    by Augastus Black

    Good poem......such true and respected words......Nicely done.