Life's Garden

by Jenni Marie   Nov 18, 2013


Stiffen up that upper lip,
tears are only for the weak,
not like you dear,
your emotions are only
another opponent waiting to
be knocked down and smited.

for you're wrapped up in strength
and dignity, with a sleeping lion
under your ribcage, waiting for
his time to pounce and
counter their attack.

life is nothing but your
evergrowing garden and you
choose whether to tend it or
simply let it die, choose the
right decision and you'll find
you'll always end up on top.

~For Chels's Survivor Contest, Round 2

~Line messaging poetry

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  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This is a very beautiful poem that holds a lot of meaning. I didn't see anything to criticize so here is what I think.

    First stanza- I like the first couple lines you say. Do tears really make you weak though?. I like how you portray this character though. I think what you are saying that this person is a hero to a lot of people and now they feel too weak to do anything. Emotions are hard to deal with sometimes yes but I like how you word this. Just another opponent... we are in a battle with life and staying strong is hard I agree. Great opening stanza it really pulls you in.

    Second- Wow this stanza is great so filled with courage and imagery. Everyone has hidden strength inside of them so the use of lion is perfect. The lion has so much courage inside of them. Maybe you are saying that the lion is your heart. that's where the emotions come from. Great stanza.

    Ending- I like this ending as well. The message is very simple. We have to tend to our own lives and if we don't we will die. The garder is a great word for life. End up up top I think you mean we will always end up happy. Great poem overall. As the wording and flow sre just great! :)

  • 10 years ago

    by sham pulok

    Awesome poem.

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