Comments : Heart aches...

  • 3 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Meena, your words are filled with such raw emotion, pain, grief and anger. The emotions are intensified when you have to take their clothes and personal items and pack them up and all the memories come flooding back, let them, relive them, cry but grieve. Over time these emotions will lessen but I am not sure they totally go away. From someone who has gone through this, you just have to take it day by day and grieve the way that is best for you, no matter how long you need. We are not all the same.

  • 3 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Oh Meena... this was so heartouching to read and made me shed a tear. Your pain and sadness at this time can be felt in reading your poem and reminded me of the pain I felt when I first lost my own mum :( Time does heal, but we always feel that piece of us missing when we lose our mum. She is such a special person and part of us.

    Very beautifully written though sad Meena, Your best poem EVER. Well done in penning this Meena. Love & Hugs

  • 3 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Meena, you are able to draw me in the poem with you. I can picture everything you are saying specially when packing her belongings. One line that stood out for me was " how you don't fill her shoes. When I was growing up, just like everyone ( I think), I used to try my mom's shoes hoping to grow into them but I don't think I'll ever do. In that sense, I can relate to the poem. Your words take me into those memories when I was a little girl, but they also make me feel your sadness and at the same time, I feel some fear. Keep on writing and like Sylvia said, that I hope I won't ever forget " cry but grieve."

  • 3 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Beautiful! Filled with strong emotions!

  • 3 years ago

    by ddavidd

    What a beautiful mother she was who caused you and all the good thing you have to say in your poetry, and finally about her here and her beauty that reflected, crystal clear, with no taint, between two mirrors, back ant fort, facing eternity!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    This is really heartfelt... Full of emotions... This piece touched my heart... I love the grief and aching that this poem has... I can imagine all the things you told in this poem... And every picture in my mind is full of raw emotion and pain... 5/5

    --- MKKK

  • 3 years ago

    by dalllllal

    This was so emotional such a great piece

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This imagery here is just outstanding. I love how you can take something so simple like clothes and bring them to life. I love how you use the sadness through out the whole poem as you tell the story of a life. The wording is flawless as well memories are are very difficult thing to deal with. Though you wrote this beautifully. Well done.

  • 3 years ago

    by Sincuna

    This seems like a sad goodbye, the reflection of longing and loss of a parent filters through the poem real well. What makes it intimate with the reader is the insertion of specific moments such as the piling of clothes and the speaker's remembrance of filling in the parent's shoes as if she was a little girl again. But the sadness rushes in when the clad and white motionless part is introduced. Such sadness. And the end explains that there were previous heartaches that could be cured, but now couldn't, because the person has passed and the heartache just rides the wind endlessly, like an echoing voice.

  • 3 years ago

    by Sincuna

    This seems like a sad goodbye, the reflection of longing and loss of a parent filters through the poem real well. What makes it intimate with the reader is the insertion of specific moments such as the piling of clothes and the speaker's remembrance of filling in the parent's shoes as if she was a little girl again. But the sadness rushes in when the clad and white motionless part is introduced. Such sadness. And the end explains that there were previous heartaches that could be cured, but now couldn't, because the person has passed and the heartache just rides the wind endlessly, like an echoing voice.

  • 3 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Am speechless!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Wow very nice poem. Heart touching

  • 3 years ago

    by Hellon

    This is such a sad write and something I can relate to as I've had to do the same thing myself unfortunately. I think, unless you have experienced having to pack someone's life and memories away you don't fully understand the emotional strain of it all. You have done a very good job here Mina...sorry for your loss.

  • 3 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Simply Superb!!!