Waiting

by Chelsey   Dec 11, 2013


I wanted to write a love story. You know the kind,
where torrential downpours didn't mean soggy
shoes, late to work, a natural reaction to being in
a bad mood; it meant getting to kiss him in the rain.
It meant curled up on the couch under his arm,
dying to tell him I love him, but questioning if
it's too soon.

I wanted to confess that I'm an addict. Totally
wooed by the tone of his voice, the way I'm
jealous of his eyes, the fact that his very "hello"
excites me for the words he brings to life.

I wanted to describe the very moment our hearts
traded places and I became responsible for the
emotions of his.

But instead,
Instead I'm here smirking, watching this flame
flicker (in a candle I lit for myself), in a bed that
holds one, in a home that awaits for it's owner-
to step into the world and fall in love.

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  • 10 years ago

    by HeatherJo

    I love the story and visuals. My favorite part was the first stanza. Very beautifully written. I am somewhat jealous I cannot place words together as perfectly as you did here.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Judging comment:

    What I adore about Chelsey's work is how she manages to convey so much emotion from start to finish, the kind of emotion that makes the reader feel her desperate yearning and her longing via her written words; and how she subtly places imagery inside that longing, thus creating such moving visuals inside the readers mind.

    "dying to tell him I love him, but questioning if
    it's too soon"

    Love this. I think we all feel this at some point in our lives, wanting to share and state our emotions and feelings to the one we love the most yet holding back for fear of being rejected and/or scaring them away.

    I was quite surprised by the last verse, to be honest, as the prior verses were so full of hope, love and adoration that I was kind of expecting a happy ending. So to suddenly realize that the writer is still only dreaming of this but has yet to experience it is kind of sad and painful.

    It's been a long time since I saw Chels write a piece like this and I have to say I dearly missed her work.

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A very descriptive write and your use of language paints a world for the reader to step into, feel and see what you feel.

    Your voice is heard within this poem making it personal and emotional..well done and Congrats on the win.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sincuna

    Lovely write. I read this as if it were slam poetry. And it flowed well, no need for proper formatting, the feeling from the first line up until the last was consistent and everflowing. Loved the ride. Good work and congrats!

  • 10 years ago

    by Breely

    Love your use of language, your descriptive words, the way it flows. I agree with MAPLE TREE, very powerful ending, keep it up :)

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