The wording here is truly fantastic. And I am not sure what else can be said here because you truly said it all. :) the last "part" is really my favorite because of the imagery you shared and the simple wording. It seems like the whole poem is singled around one kiss and I am glad you changed the title. It makes for a more romantic feeling. :). It's really amazing how you can take one idea and make it vivid and it seems like altogether each part tells a story about falling in love. Simply amazing :). Well done! Love this so much.

This was beautiful Hannah. I loved the word usage and the repetition at the end. "You can't make homes out of human beings". I disagree, one person can be your home...
Still, a beautiful write.
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Awesome job with this poem looooved it!!!

I like the layout, the storytelling and the flow is immense. It reads so natural.

what works best for me is how you tied the beginning and end together with the quotation

You can't make homes out of human beings.

fleshes out the bones of the poem.

great write.

thanks for the translation at the end.