I personally don't think a lot needs to be said here :). As far as I saw nothing needs to change. I loved the use of broken arrows and I'll explain that in a min. The use of sadness is great here and the ability to not stray off of it through out is well done. Each stanza tells a sad story that I think can be represented as a family and you showed each view point of them. I could be wrong be that's what I got from it. A broken home and abuse is very hard to overcome. I loved how you detailed each characters sadness. That was great. The broken arrows are represented by the broken life they each hold and how they feel inside I think. The ending with them is perfect. Perfect to me. The story is fantastic and you didn't hold back at all. Love it!!
This poem touched me on so many levels.
each stanza as heartbreaking as the last one and sadly many things i can relate to. this is vey well penned, and can tell its been written by the heart,
very good write! i look forward to reading more of your work 5/5