Hi Joss. I loved this poem so much for a lot of reasons. First of all the title. I found it's simplicity fits perfectly with the rest of the poem. You used it as the first line and after that the poem itsself is immense with details and holds a brilliant tone of sadness. The wording is used well overall and the lines connect with each otherwell. You ddescribe this person with vivid sadness and the wording enhances that even the second line with crying tears is great. Okay the metaphor here is perfect. Though you don't really mean the water you mean the hurt inside. And burningbridges you twisted it here . This person lost everything and they are trying to hold on tightly. I loved the tight rope line as well because she is trying to balance but if she falls off it's all over. Also the ending was amazing because you used a great metaphor to swallow her alive and the waves are the depression eating her alive This poem struck me in the heart. It's great just great. Beautiful. I really hope someone nominates this or I will when I can. Beautiful
Besides the poem itself I like the title you have picked. Never burn down your brides completely there may come a day when you have to cross that same bridge again. I can feel that deep pain inside. Wonderful write
I enjoyed this one in the contest, I thought you done an amazing job to use that painting and focus your words around the image/title.
This one really spoke to me, and I feel it hold a lot in which can be related to.
If I was to sum the poem up, it would just be "life". This is what life is, we make mistakes, decisions, we hold on to things/people too much, and then we finally feel the bravery to burn our bridges, and yet we spend that process of mourning them, of watching those ashes slip away.
Then comes in the inner battle within us, where the insanity seems to be so strong, and the loneliness creeps in.
I did really enjoy this poem. Well done.
4 years ago
by Burning Angel
Wow, this sadness you pinned here is amazing! I love this poem so much.