The Shine of the Rainbow

by HiddenScars   Mar 6, 2014


She falls to her knees with tears streaming down her face. She has a pain in her chest that nobody could ever describe. The true pain is heartbreak. She starts to write a letter, but her hand trembles and she drops her pen. All she was able to write was, "I'm moving onto a new place, where there's more people like me, the sinners and the ones who disgrace." Her thoughts are racing, bouncing up and down in her mind, she thinks to herself, "Why is this happening to me?" Then the voices inside her head are silent, and she lays there finally in peace with herself.

Looking down from heaven you can finally see the whole picture, see how much people care about you, see how many people are down there thinking about you every night. She sees her mom writing a poem for her, making the ink fade away with her tears. Watching her mascara running down her face, listening to hear her silent cries. Her mom can't control her emotions, and nobody is there to grieve with her. Her husband, off at war, with no clue about what has just happened. She locks herself in her room, covers the windows, and disappears from the outside world.

Heaven is a peaceful place, everyone thinks that it is a perfect paradise, but that's not true. It's a perfect place physically, but you're still left with the emotions that you had. She's able to look down to see what's happening, hoping to give her mom a sign that even though she is gone, that she is okay. Her mom couldn't say a goodbye to her, her life was cut too short. How did she get so lonely, without anyone knowing? What could've pushed her over the edge into such a dark place.

Her funeral was set for today, everybody from town came. As she looks down, she starts to cry, her tears turning into the rain on the earth. She's stuck on the idea of if everybody finally noticed her because she's gone, or if they actually care about her. Her dad couldn't come back in time for the funeral, but just this morning, he got the letter in the mail saying what has happened. Her dad, her best friend, her idol, broke down in front of his whole platoon. He couldn't even explain what was going on. It's like her mom could feel the pain he was feeling and it struck her in the heart and she broke down at the funeral.

When everyone got to the cemetery, her mom set the poem and a single rose on her casket before it was laid beneath the earth. The poem said:

The sunshine came out for you today,

I hope you saw that I'm okay.

Your smile embedded into my mind,

Because it was so bright it shined.

The rest of the poem was blurred by her mom's tears. Her mom feels a slight touch on her shoulder and turns around, but nobody is there. She was finally able to give her mom a hint that she was okay and then slowly the rain let up, and the rainbow started to shine.

I'm sorry that this is more like a story than a poem, but I really liked how I wrote this so feel free to rate and comment <3 love y'all

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  • 9 years ago

    by LoneWolf

    This is beautiful. I feel like I can relate to it imagining that if I were dead. If I had passed on watching everybody suddenly care about me. I've visioned things like this and it's not a pleasant thing to think about. It all ends with a spark of happiness and I like that

  • 9 years ago

    by Dragon Boy

    Yeah i was gonna say it's more like a story, but a good story, i was able to picture all you were saying, i liked the way you wrote it.. very good.. sad poem .. good job on it ..

  • 9 years ago

    by Dragon Boy

    Yeah i was gonna say it's more like a story, but a good story, i was able to picture all you were saying, i liked the way you wrote it.. very good.. sad poem .. good job on it ..

  • 9 years ago

    by Trinity Heart

    This poem is really sad and beautiful

  • 10 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Okay, i am having to read this and write at the same time just so i can talk about each paragraph.. First off, I love the beginning because since it is in the story format then i really was able to get into it.

    I got chills during the first paragraph because heartbreak can be such a strong thing. The letter indicates that she is so tired of being hurt and all the pain is finally to much for her to bear and she feels as though she is alone in this.

    The second paragraph just has so much... raw emotion. my Heart literally aches for the mother because she seems to be going through all this alone and she finally just shuts herself off from the entire world. the part about her dad being off at war really got to me because that is going to be something he is going to have to read in a letter or find out when he gets home. It makes the pain alittle worse while reading.

    The third paragraph really got to me because she is explaining how she is still in pain even though she is actually in heaven... And then you kind of have her mom feeling guilty because she feels as though she should have seen the signs and she wonders why she did not notice this "Dark Place" that her daughter was in.

    In the fourth poem, i broke down. There is so much emotion, so many unexplainable things that no one can really understand... At the funeral, everyone showed up and it kind of makes me feel as though people noticed and liked her but she was so lonely that she was unable to realize how much she was actually liked. her dad getting the letter and breaking down really hurts beacause i hate to see someone cry, espcially considering that this man was a solider and was such an amazing part in her life calling him "Her Hero". It kinda makes me wonder if maybe him being gone also maybe had an impact on how she was feeling. Maybe he feels alittle guilty for not being there?

    The very end of the poem gave me more chills and my heart lifted because she was finally able to show her mother that she was okay!

    This is an amazing write overall. the entire poem just had its way of messing with your emotions and making you wonder what is going to happen.

    • 10 years ago

      by HiddenScars

      Thank you so much!<3 all of that feedback means so much to me(: thank you again

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