Thanks Meena. This is an old poem, from the archives of my poetry libraries, that I resurrected for someone who contacted me on facebook looking for a short sweet poem for the girl she is trying to build a relationship with. I remembered this old poem that might work, so I when to one of my former poetry homes and pulled this from my posted work on there and revised it some to improve its overall aesthetic quality. Then, I posted it here and messaged it to her.
I love this poem! i just have one suggestion, all of the commas really threw me off because i was not sure how to pause due to how easily the sentence would have been put together without some of the commas. overall this is really an amazing poem!