This is amazing. This is great. This is wow. I love everything you write but this is honestly so simple so pure and so raw in its reality that it is one of your best. I don't understand how more people have yet to comment on this (although I will admit i read it multiple times on multiple occasions and always told myself i would come back to comment when I knew what to say; it's just that this piece leaves me speechless every time i read it. ) I am so glad that somebody nominated this because your wording is stunning, your style is spot on, the way you captured the essence of a beach personifying it to portray yourself (or maybe someone you know) is not only creative because you chose words that captivated me in the most vivid of ways but also told a story so common and overdone in a way that none other can yet parallel. Fantastic write. Beautiful piece.
4 years ago
by Tara Kay
Congratulations on the win! I loved the intensity in this piece, it was short but the emotion and rawness spoke volumes. This was really well written and well deserved to win. As always, you amaze me :) x
I love this poem. Specially when I read it in the contest as you finished posting it. Though, right now I have a bit of a critique. Rather something that is revolving around my head. The title says "lighthouse" so I am confused if the one narrating is the lighthouse or the land? In some occasions, I thought it was the lighthouse but in others the land. I mean I always read it as if it was just the land speaking to the water. And the water trying to persuade the land to sink in it, but makes more sense if it was the lighthouse. I think.
I am not sure how to explain myself, I'll try to come back and see if I can make sense out of myself. Regardless of it. Congrats on the win. I truly enjoyed the creativity of this piece.
MaryAnne designed such a pretty small poem here, and I had to highlight it this week. What a dazzler. Small poems need to be packed with a punch and she has done that and more here with this poem.
I was left with such a feeling in my heart as I read this poem. It is very difficult to take that step forward in life, to "leave the sandy shore and sail away" and she captivated me with this metaphoric message of beauty. Very pretty poem this week by MaryAnne!!